The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.
Sample Response
The given diagramspictorial show the life cycle of the silkworm and also shows the processes of silk cloth productionproductions. The life cycle of a silkworm begins withfrom the eggs laid by the mother worm and from these eggs the silkworm larvae hatchsilkworm larvae are generated after 10 days. The silkworm larva usually feeds on mulberry leaveseats leaves like mulberry leaves and completes the second stage of the life cycle in 4-6 weeks. In their third stage, they create silk threadsilk thread shells and remain there for another 3 to 8 days and then create an oval cocoon. The cocoon stage lasts for around 16 days and they become a mothbecome moth in the final stage. With time the adult moths lay eggsmoths become grown-up and recycle the processes again. The second picture describes the processes of the silk cloth production which have five main stagesmore than 5 stages. In the initial stage, the silk thread shells of the silkworm are selected and then boiled in the next stage. After boiling in water the threads are unwoundunwinded and they are usually 300 to 900 metresmeter long. Then these are twisted and dyed and finally, they are woventhose are weaved to silks. The twisting, dying, weaving and then dying again the process is can occur before or after weavingdone more than once as per necessary to produce fine quality silks.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response covers both diagrams, reports all four life-cycle timings, and follows the main production sequence. Its main weakness is accuracy and precision: it confuses the larva's silk thread with a shell, gives a vague overview, and adds unsupported repetition and quality claims. Prioritise a clear overview of the cyclical and linear processes, then use accurate process vocabulary and controlled passive forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Both processes and most key timings are covered, but the overview is weak and several production details are inaccurate or unsupported.
State that one diagram is cyclical and the other is a linear five-stage process, then report only stages shown in the visuals.
Coherence and Cohesion
The description progresses from the life cycle to cloth production, though it is presented as one dense paragraph and some referencing is unclear.
Use an introduction, overview, and one paragraph for each diagram, with sequencing language that makes stage relationships explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is enough process vocabulary to communicate meaning, but frequent collocation and word-form errors reduce precision.
Use exact terms such as larvae hatch, spin silk thread, form a cocoon, unwind, twist, dye, and weave.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear, but agreement, articles, plurals, passive forms, and irregular participles are often inaccurate.
Practise present-simple passive structures and check subject-verb agreement and countable nouns throughout.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.
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