The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
Sample Response
The first graph showsshowcases the main reasons for studyingmain causes for education among studentsscholars of diverse age groups whereas the second graph shows the level of support students receive from their employersthe level of support they get from their companies in terms of time off and financial help.
As per the graph, we can clearly see that with age the reason to opt for education for career decreases with time and in terms of interest intends to increase. Students under age 26 choose education for career purposes is about 8 times as compared to the students who choose education for interest.
To illustrate, eight out of ten people under 26 studypeople under age 26 years continue studies for their career whereas one out of ten people under 26one out of ten under age 26 years study for interestopted for education for interest. As age increasesWith the increase in age, interest becomes a stronger motivation for studythe motivation for studies is interest increases as seven out of 10 people over 49in their fifties study for this reasonopted for education for this reason.
In terms of employer supporthelp from employer about 65% of employees under 26 receive support65% of employee get help aged below 26 years whereas with time the figure tendsthe trend tend to decrease to about 34%till 33% among those aged 30–39aged between 30-39. People in the age range between 40 to 49, almost four out of ten employees get both kinds of help wheres the trend increases when age surpasses 49 where 42 per cent of people get financial aid and time off by their employer.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the two central age-related trends and supports them with several relevant figures from both charts. However, coverage of the middle age groups is selective, some employer-support values are imprecise, and frequent grammatical and collocational errors make several comparisons awkward. Prioritise a fuller, accurately quantified overview of the crossover and support pattern, then express each comparison in a clean sentence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main opposing study trends and the broad employer-support pattern are identified, but intermediate features and several figures are incomplete or imprecise.
Highlight the equal career and interest figures for ages 40-49 and report employer support accurately as about 65%, 50%, 35%, 38%, and 45%.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a sensible chart-by-chart progression and clear paragraph divisions, although some long sentences and repetitive connectors weaken flow.
Organise each chart around one overview sentence followed by two concise comparisons, avoiding repeated whereas constructions.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, but frequent awkward choices such as scholars, causes for education, and intends reduce precision.
Prefer standard chart language such as students, reasons for studying, tends to rise, and employer support.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple meaning is generally clear, but frequent agreement, article, plural, and sentence-structure errors limit grammatical control.
Check every clause for a complete subject-verb structure and match plural subjects with plural nouns and verb forms.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
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