The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.
Sample Response
The bar chartcolumn graph represents the average number of hours taught by teachersdata on average teaching hours by each educator in 2001 in Japan, Spain, Iceland and the USA in the primary, lower secondary and upperhigher secondary school levels. Generally speaking, a US tutor on averageon an average spent more hours teachingmore hours on schooling than Japanese, Spanish, and Icelandic teachersthan that of Japanese, Spanish and Icelandic teachers in 2001 and the time spent on teaching increasedincreases at higher school levelswith the class levels in all countries. According to the illustration, teachers in Japan, Spain, and Icelandan instructor in Japan, Spain and Iceland typically spent around 600 hours in 2001 teaching primary-level studentsto teach elementary level students. This figureduration in the USA was the highest, roughly 750 hours. A US mentor taught lower secondary students for exactly 1000 hours in the same year and the corresponding figures for Iceland and Japan were roughly 600 and 650 hours, respectivelyit was roughly 600 hours in Iceland and Japan. However, lower secondary teachers in Spain spentdisbursed roughly 750 hours each to their students. Finally, the time spent to teach upper-secondary studentshigher secondary pupil in the USA was approximately 1200 hours which was 300 hours less in Iceland and Spain and precisely 700 hours in Japan.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response identifies the dominant patterns clearly and supports them with accurate, well-selected figures across all school levels and countries. Organisation is easy to follow, although the report is presented as one paragraph and a few word choices, such as disbursed for teaching hours, sound unnatural. The highest-priority improvement is to group the overview and details into distinct paragraphs while using more precise academic collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and accurately selects the principal values and comparisons across countries and school levels.
Add one direct comparison between Japan's and Iceland's upper-secondary figures to make the detail even more discriminating.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report follows a clear sequence from overview through the three school levels, with cohesive links that generally support progression.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs so the strong logical grouping is also visible on the page.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, though a few forced synonyms and collocations sound unnatural in this context.
Use neutral terms such as teachers, taught, and spent teaching rather than replacing them with less suitable alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of sentence structures is handled with control, despite occasional errors in comparison, articles, and singular-plural agreement.
Check comparative structures and noun agreement, especially phrases comparing one country's teachers with those of another.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.
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