The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.
Sample Response
The table data outlines travel patternstransportation preferences by people in EnglandBritish commuters between 1985 and 2000. As is obvious, cars were the most common means of transport in both yearsthe two mentioned years in the UK. Interestingly, the British did not use taxis quite often back in 1985, only 13 miles per year was cut by every citizen which made the taxi the least common mode of transportation this year. However, this number increased to 42 miles per person in 2000. By 2000On the other hand, bicycles were amongone of the least-used modes of travelleast used vehicles in 2000 at only 41 miles per personcovering only 41 passenger miles. It is clear that cars were still the most widely used modestill on top of preference among commuters, increasing from 3,199 miles in 1985around 3000 miles in 1985 to 4,806 miles in 2000over 4800 miles in 2000. The distance travelled on footWalking habits remained almost the same for the British while the use of local buses declined. Each personpassenger travelled around 290 miles per year by trainmiles per year in trains and that rose to 366 miles by 2000rose slightly after 15 years. The overall distance travelled by the people in EnglandEnglish citizens went up from 4,740 to 6,475 miles in 15 years, and the car was the primary means of transportation for them. Delete[Author - Malaa ]
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response identifies the dominant role of cars and the rise in total travel, and it supports these observations with several accurate figures. Its main limitation is selective coverage: long-distance buses and the sizeable other category are omitted, while some descriptions are imprecise. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the report into clear paragraphs and compare the largest increases and decreases using more natural, exact language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several accurate figures cover the principal trends, but two categories and some useful comparisons are omitted.
Compare the strongest rises and falls explicitly, including long-distance buses and the other category.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses sensibly from the overview to selected details, although the single-paragraph format and a few mechanical links weaken organisation.
Separate the overview from grouped detail paragraphs and use contrast markers only where the relationship is genuinely contrastive.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate range for transport and change, but awkward collocations such as miles was cut and on top of preference reduce precision.
Use standard data-reporting phrases such as travelled, remained the dominant mode, rose, and declined.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the meaning, but agreement, reference, and sentence-construction errors recur.
Check subject-verb agreement and recast overloaded sentences so each comparison has a clear subject and verb.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.
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