The diagrams below show UK students’ responses to the question of to what extent would they describ e themselves as financially organised.
Sample Response
The pie chart showstwo diagrams show students’ responses to the question of how financially organised they consider themselveshow good they are at managing their finances. The pie chart illustrates the ability of UK students to manage their finances and the table shows the proportion of students, by age, who think they are very organised at managing their finances.
More than three-quarters of students (76%) describe themselves asbelieve they are either ‘very’ or ‘fairly’ organised financially, while one in five (20%) say they are not very organised in this area. Only 4% of students rate themselves as ‘not at all organised’‘not at all’ competent.
The ability to manage one’s finances well would seem to develop with age and experience as older students are almost twice as likely to say they are ‘very’ organised than younger ones (31% of students aged 26 or over compared to just 17% for those aged up to 22).
Overall, the findings suggest that students generally manage their finances well.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response is concise, fluent, and logically arranged, with accurate reporting of the pie chart's combined 76%, 20%, and 4% proportions. Its main limitation is that a substantial paragraph introduces age-based figures that are not supported by the attached visual, while the 55% and 21% categories are never identified separately. Prioritise describing and comparing only the visible data, with a more specific overview of the dominant and smallest groups.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The visible pie-chart data are broadly accurate and an overview is present, but the age-based comparison is unsupported and the two organised categories are not separately quantified.
Describe the 55% fairly organised and 21% very organised groups explicitly, and remove any detail that cannot be verified from the supplied visual.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses clearly from an introduction through details to a concise overview, with cohesive links used smoothly.
Strengthen the information structure by placing the overview immediately after the introduction and grouping all verified details together.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied, precise, and well suited to reporting proportions and financial organisation, with only a minor label shift from organised to competent.
Retain the chart's exact category wording so that labels such as not at all organised are reported with complete precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is handled accurately, and nearly all sentences are error-free and easy to follow.
Refine the comparative construction to almost twice as likely as younger students for fully idiomatic accuracy.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below show UK students’ responses to the question of to what extent would they describ e themselves as financially organised.
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