The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
Sample Response
The bar chart gives information about the proportions of male and female teachersmale and female tutors' ratio in six distinct types of educational institutions in the UK in 2010.
Overall, female teachers outnumbered male teacherswere greater in number than the male teachers in nursery/pre-school and primary educationjunior levels of educational institutes. However, at university levelin higher education level, there were more male teachers than female teachersthan that of women teachers. In private training institutes, colleges and secondary schools, the proportions of male and female teachers wereratio of teachers from both genders were quite similar.
According to the given illustration, there was a large differencesignificant dissimilarity between the proportions of male and female teachersnumber of men and women educators in nursery/pre-school settingsNursery/Pre-school levels as well as primary schools. There were almost 98% and 96% female teachers in these two levels which show that the dominance of female teachers in early education level.
In the case of colleges, there was 50 percent male teachers and 50 percent of female teachers which show the equal number of teachers from both genders. At secondary-school levelIn secondary level, the ratio of male teachers (about 45%) was lower than that of female teachers (about 55%)(about 47%) was slightly higher than that of female teachers (about 43%). The proportion of female teachersFemale teachers' ration in private training institutes was lowerhigher than that of male teachers - about 43% female teachers compared with 57% male teachersabout 47% female teachers against 43% male teachers. The male teachers in secondary schools were correlative to the female teachers of the private training institutions. At university levelIn University level, men accounted for 70% of teachers, compared with 30% for womenthere were 40% more male teachers than the women teachers.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is clearly organized and identifies the broad contrast between female dominance in early education and male dominance at university. Its main limitation is data accuracy: it reverses the male-female relationship in both secondary schools and private training institutes and misreports several percentages. The highest-priority improvement is to verify each bar pair against the chart before drafting comparisons, then use simpler grammatical structures to reduce agreement and comparative errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview captures the broad shift from female dominance at early levels to male dominance at university, but several detailed figures and two gender comparisons are inaccurate.
Report secondary school as approximately 45% men and 55% women and private training as about 55% men and 45% women.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear introduction, overview and grouped details, though some comparisons and references are awkwardly connected.
Group nursery and primary together, then compare secondary, college and private training systematically before ending with university.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a reasonable range of comparison vocabulary, but several choices such as 'tutors' ratio,' 'ration' and 'correlative' are inaccurate.
Prefer precise, natural terms such as 'proportion,' 'percentage-point difference' and 'similar figure' for chart comparisons.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the main ideas, but agreement, article and comparative-form errors recur.
Use controlled comparison patterns such as 'the proportion of women was higher than that of men' and check subject-verb agreement.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
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