The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates.
Sample Response
The flowchart illustrates the steps that a high school graduate needs to follow to gain admission to universityget admitted to the university. OverallAs can be seen, there are several stagesvarious steps that a high-school graduatehigh school degree holder has to completego through to be accepted as a university student. Once a student obtains a high-school degreecompletes his high school course, he needs to complete an university application formapplication form to apply for the university and this application form cancould be downloaded from the university website. Candidates then need to send it to the administration officesend the application to the administration. Applicants receive a reply two weeks later and the reply is one ofthe reply includes a rejection, an acceptance or a provisional acceptance. Candidates who get a rejection can either apply for a different course or can cancel their applications. On the other hand, provisional acceptance means more documentations are required. When accepted, the candidate needsWhen a candidate receives an acceptance, the applicant needs to select a subject and thenselect a subject, and then register with the dean. After completing these stepsWhen all these steps are completed, a candidate is ready to enter universitystart his university life.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents the application procedure in a clear sequence and accurately identifies the three possible administrative outcomes, making the main route to enrolment easy to follow. Its principal limitation is incomplete treatment of the two feedback loops: provisionally accepted applicants must compile and resubmit documents, while rejected applicants choosing another course must complete a new application. The priority is to describe these return paths explicitly.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main stages and all three outcomes are covered accurately, but the resubmission loops after provisional acceptance and an alternative-course choice are underdeveloped.
Explain that both compiling extra documentation and completing an alternative-course application lead back to submitting materials to administration.
Coherence and Cohesion
The process unfolds in a logical sequence with clear temporal and contrast markers, although all stages are contained in one paragraph.
Separate the initial application, three decision branches, and successful enrolment route into short, clearly grouped paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and appropriate for applications and admissions, with only minor imprecision and repetition of candidate labels.
Use the chart's exact terms, including 'compile documentation', 'complete enrolment', and 'apply for an alternative course'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of controlled sentence structures communicates the process clearly, with only occasional errors in prepositions, countability, and parallel phrasing.
Refine forms such as 'apply to a university', uncountable 'documentation', and the parallel structure 'can either apply or cancel'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates.
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