The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates.
Sample Response
The given flow chart illustrates thedifferent steps that a high school graduate has to go through to be admitted to a university. Overall, the process begins with the application submission and ends with the entry into universitycompletion of the university entry. According to the illustration, to be able to apply for university admissionapply for the university admission, someone has to obtain a high school degreecomplete the high school diploma. The initial step involves downloading the application form from the websitegetting the application form online and then sending it to the administratorsubmitting it to the admin. The admin categorisescategories applications intoin two main groups – rejected and accepted. Those who have been rejected are either required to cancel their applicationpermanently refused or given an opportunity to reapply for an alternative coursea different subject. To apply for an alternative course, an applicanta contestant has to complete an alternative-course application and resubmit it to the administratorgo through the whole process again. The accepted applicantspupils are also classified intoin two categories – fullydirectly accepted and provisionally accepted. Those who are provisionally accepted need to submit further documents and this process usually takes two weeks. By contrastOn the contrary, those who are fully accepted for admissionwho are fully accepted for the admission, select their preferred subjectsubjects and register with the dean of the faculty. After the completion of these steps, a student is considered eligible to enter the university and the student then enters the universitythese final steps also require 2 weeks.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response covers nearly every stage and branch of the admissions process, with a clear sense of progression from initial eligibility to university entry. The main limitation is occasional imprecision, particularly the claim that the final selection and registration steps take two weeks, alongside several unsuitable participant labels. Improve by attaching each time period to the correct decision outcome and using consistent terms such as applicant throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The major stages, outcomes, and return loops are covered clearly, but the two-week timing is attached to the final steps rather than to the administrative outcomes.
State that the administrative decision routes take two weeks and distinguish this timing from the later subject-selection and registration stages.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence progresses logically through rejection, provisional acceptance, and complete enrolment, with referencing that generally keeps the branches easy to follow.
Separate the overview and the main alternative routes into distinct paragraphs to make the branching structure even easier to scan.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of process vocabulary, although terms such as 'contestant', 'pupils', and 'On the contrary' are unsuitable in this context.
Use 'applicant' consistently and choose neutral sequencing language such as 'for fully accepted applicants' when moving between branches.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied simple and complex sentences are mostly well controlled, with only occasional errors such as 'admin categories' and the incomplete clause beginning 'who are fully accepted'.
Check verb forms and ensure every relative or subordinate clause has an explicit grammatical subject before finalising the report.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates.
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