The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
Sample Response
The pie chart illustrates the charity's revenueconcept of receiving the funds from the children’s charity located in the United StatesNations over one yearfor over a year.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart that donated food accounted for the majority of the income, while programprogramming services and accountedconcrete for the most expenditure.
In detail, donated food provided the largest share of revenueprovides maximum revenue for the children'steenager charity at 86.6%with shares at 86% similarly, the highest source of expenditure was program services, which accounted for 95.8%one category program services which accounted at 95.8%. Other sections were much smaller. Following this, community contributions were the second-largest revenue sourcecommunity contribution second-largest revenue source, bringing in 10.4%. This was.this was followed by program revenue at 2.2%.
Moreover, investment income and government grants had similar earnings with shares at 0.2% and 0.4% of the profit on by charity from other income sections. It is interesting to note that there were only two otherothers expenditure items.
Fundraising and management and general accountedaccounting for 2.6% and 1.6%, respectively. Therefore the total revenuetotal amount of profit was $53,561,5805356 1580 dollars, and the total expendituretotal consumption of the fund was $53,224,896532 24864dollars. It seems that the charityIt seems that charity had more income as compared to expenditure.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response’s clearest strength is its overview, which identifies donated food and program services as the dominant categories and notes that income exceeded spending. Its main limitation is unreliable detail: several percentages are rounded or reversed, the totals are badly malformed, and some descriptions become unclear. The highest priority is to copy figures and category names accurately from the charts, then compare them in controlled, grammatically complete sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and most major categories are included, but the report misstates the setting, reverses two small revenue figures, and seriously distorts both totals.
Check every label and number against the charts, especially 86.6%, the two minor income sources, and the total revenue and expenditure.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a recognizable overview-to-detail sequence, although linking is sometimes mechanical and several incomplete or poorly joined sentences interrupt the flow.
Group revenue and expenditure details into two focused paragraphs and use connectors only where the logical relationship is clear.
Lexical Resource
Relevant terms such as revenue, expenditure, grants, and fundraising show some range, but frequent inaccurate choices and collocations sometimes obscure meaning.
Use precise chart-report phrases such as accounted for, contributed, and totalled, and avoid unsuitable terms such as teenager charity and consumption of the fund.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied structures, but frequent omissions, agreement errors, fragments, and faulty sentence boundaries reduce clarity.
Build complete comparison sentences with explicit subjects and verbs, then proofread punctuation, spacing, articles, and verb forms.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
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