The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019.
Sample Response
The bar chart illustrates the reasons men and women chose to work from home in 2019. Overall, saving money was the main reason for both males and females (45% and 42% respectively). In contrast, approximately a quarter of males gave increased productivity as a reasonput productivity as a reason, which was twice as high as the female response (24% and 11% respectively). For childcare, the pattern was different again with just over a quarter of femalesalmost a quarter of females giving this reason compared to very few males (4%).
The table shows the hours men and women worked from home in 2019. The vast majority of males worked over 30 hours per week (81%), compared withworked over 30 hours per week (81%) contrasting with a minority of females (6%) workingdoing similar hours. This pattern is reversed when examining the under-10-hours categoryunder ten hours category with almost three quarters of females working this number of hoursworking this amount compared to only 3% of males. The 10 to 30 hours per week category shows lessfewer marked differences.
Overall,To sum up, it can be seen that men and women do not always give the same reasons for home working and, in general, men work longer hours from home.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response accurately synthesizes both visuals, with especially strong comparisons of male and female working hours and a clear overall message. The main limitation is minor selectivity and precision: the 16% versus 22% middle-hours figures are omitted, and 26% is described as almost a quarter. Add that comparison and use exact proportional language while preserving the concise organization.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents an effective overview and accurately selects nearly all major contrasts across both visuals.
Include the 16% and 22% figures for the middle-hours group and describe 26% as just over a quarter.
Coherence and Cohesion
The two visuals are handled in focused sections, and comparisons progress clearly within each section.
Move the final point about men working longer hours into the opening overview to reduce repetition at the end.
Lexical Resource
Flexible comparative vocabulary conveys scale and contrast well, with only occasional awkward choices such as put productivity as a reason.
Use more natural collocations, such as cited greater productivity as a reason and worked that number of hours.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex comparative structures is used accurately, with only minor punctuation and phrasing lapses.
Use a comma or a full relative clause before contrasting with to make the over-30-hours comparison fully controlled.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019.
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