The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
Sample Response
The given pie charts show data on world population, the people’s spending on basic needsspending of people in basic needs and the share of world resources consumedtheir share of resource consumption. As is presented in the graph, people of the world spent the largest share on foodspent most of their amount for their foods and more than half of the population lives in Asia whereas more than half of the resources are consumed by the people in the USA and EuropeUSA and European people. According to the first pie chart, people of the world spent, on average,on an average spent 24% on foodfoods. OnIn clothing, they spent 6% while this percentage is double for housing and triple for the transport. The remaining 40% is the combination of other categories for spending. The second pie chart shows that more than half of the world populationpopulations live in the Asian continentAsia continent while Europe and America each account for only 14%Europe & America have both only 14% of the total population. One-tenth of the world population lives in Africa and the remaining 5% of peoplerest of the 5% people live in other places of the world. Finally, the third pie chart shows that 60%though that 60% of world resources are consumed by the population of USA and Europe although they represent only 28% of the populationthough their percentage is only 28% in total. The remaining 40% resources are used by the remainingshared among the rest of the 72% world population of other regions of the world.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response covers all three charts and highlights the most important contrast between population distribution and resource consumption, using relevant proportions throughout. Its main limitation is that dense one-paragraph organisation and frequent awkward or inaccurate phrasing weaken clarity and precision. Prioritise a concise overview of the unequal relationship between population and resource use, then group details into shorter paragraphs and edit articles, plurals, connectors, and chart terminology carefully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response describes all three pie charts and selects the main contrasts well, especially Asia’s population share and the USA/Europe resource consumption share. Minor wording issues and a few imprecise statements prevent a higher score.
Add a more explicit overview contrasting unequal resource use with population distribution, and keep each chart’s units and categories precise.
Coherence and Cohesion
The answer is logically sequenced from spending to population to resource consumption, though it is written as one dense paragraph.
Use short paragraphs for the three chart groups or an overview plus two detail paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate, but there are repeated basic words and some unnatural phrases such as “spent most of their amount for their foods”.
Use precise nouns: expenditure, proportion, share, consumption, population distribution.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is generally understandable, but errors with articles, plurals and clause structure are frequent.
Edit plural nouns and remove duplicated connectors such as “though that” and repeated “though”.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
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