You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter: - explain why you would like the job - give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ - say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding the your advertisementadvertisement mentioned by you in a magazine. I would be delighted to care forwould love the job of looking after your six-year-old child. As we know, children are the most innocent among us and we get to learn a lot in the process of teaching them about life. I would be a suitable candidatea suitable person to employ as I havehad looked after my younger siblings before. I know how hard it can be for working parents to keep track ofkeep the checks on all of a child's needsall the needs of a child. Moreover, I am working on my final-semester projectmy final semester project which I can complete remotelywhich can be done remotely, so a six-month staysix months of stay will not be an obstacle to my workwill not an obstruction in our way. I will also be able to spend my free time in Australia. Because your house is in Sydney, itIt will be easy for me to visit various museums and art galleries in the citynearby in the city. Also, I might take the opportunity to seetry my chance to see the Australian cricketCricket team play live at their home groundon their grounds. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Narender Modi
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter addresses the parents appropriately, covers all three requested points, and gives concrete plans for free time in Sydney. Its main limitation is that the reasons for wanting the role and being suitable are only briefly developed, while several awkward expressions and grammar slips weaken polish; the priority is to add specific childcare skills and revise inaccurate collocations and sentence structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and all three bullet points are addressed, although the childcare motivation and suitability details remain fairly general.
Add specific examples of childcare duties, skills, or situations that demonstrate why you would be dependable with a six-year-old.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow the task points in a sensible order, but the single-block presentation and some mechanical linking reduce the clarity of the progression.
Use separate paragraphs for motivation, suitability, and free-time plans, with smoother transitions between them.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic, but phrases such as keeping checks, an obstruction in our way, and try my chance are unnatural.
Choose more natural collocations, such as meeting a child's needs, posing no obstacle, and trying to see a cricket match.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex forms communicates the message, though errors in verb forms, missing words, capitalization, and sentence construction are noticeable.
Proofread clauses for complete verb structures and accurate tense choices, especially in sentences about prior childcare and the six-month stay.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter:
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
Your response
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