You are a member of an International Students' club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world. Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter: - offer to make a popular dish from your country - describe what this dish is - explain why it should be included in the event

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Sample Response

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Dear Luis,

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I am excited about the upcoming international food event and would like to thank you for organising it. I would be delighted to contribute to the eventwould love to contribute to this event by preparing a celebratedfamous dish from China called Peking Duck.

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As you might already know, Peking Duck is one of China’s most iconic dishesmost iconic and celebrated dishes, originating from Beijing. It features crispy, golden-brown roasted duck served with thin pancakes, spring onions, cucumber, and a rich hoisin sauce. The combination of textures and flavours—crispyflavours - crispy skin, tender meat, and sweet-savoury sauce - makes it a distinctive dishtruly unforgettable dish. Traditionally, it is prepared using a special roasting technique that enhances its flavour and gives the skin a crisp textureensures a perfect crunch.

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I believe Peking Duck would be an excellent addition to the event because it represents China’s rich culinary heritage and is popular worldwidewidely loved around the world. It would provide attendees with an authentic taste of Chinese cuisine and add diversity to the selection of dishes at the event. Please let me know if I can proceed with this contributiongo ahead with this contribution.

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Looking forward to your response.

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Yours sincerely,

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Chen Hao

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.5

The letter fully addresses the request with an engaging, precise description of Peking Duck, and its strongest feature is the natural integration of cultural significance with sensory detail. Its only notable limitation is a slight reliance on polished generalities rather than practical event detail; the best refinement would be to add one brief, concrete point about how the dish would be prepared or served at the event.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

9.0
Scoring rule

The purpose and all three bullet points are fully and convincingly developed in an appropriately warm, polite register.

Next step

As a final refinement, add a practical detail about preparing or serving the dish at the event.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

8.5
Scoring rule

The letter progresses smoothly from the offer to the description and justification, with clear paragraphing and unobtrusive cohesion.

Next step

Make the closing request connect even more directly to the proposed contribution by briefly confirming the next logistical step.

LR

Lexical Resource

8.5
Scoring rule

Vocabulary is varied, precise, and natural, especially in the vivid description of the dish and its cultural value.

Next step

Replace one or two familiar evaluative phrases such as "truly unforgettable" with a more specific, personal observation.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.5
Scoring rule

A wide range of sentence structures is used accurately and flexibly, with virtually no grammatical impediments.

Next step

Maintain this control while adding one concise conditional or modal sentence about the event arrangements.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You are a member of an International Students' club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world. Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter:

- offer to make a popular dish from your country

- describe what this dish is

- explain why it should be included in the event

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