You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: - introduce yourself - explain what sort of job you would like - say what experience and skills you have
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I have heard about your employment agency from my friend who recently got a two-year work placement at a Japanese company, with your agency's assistancecourtesy of your wonderful efforts. Not to mention, of course, after hearing the success story from my friend, I have also decided to reach you and request you find a suitable part-time job for me. By way of introductionTo introduce myself a little, I am a Greek national and currently a final-year university studentcurrently studying at a university as a final-year student, majoring in Accounting Information Systems, here in Montreal. My current GPA is 3.5 if this information is relevantif it really matters. As for the type of work I am seekingwhat sort of job I want, an office job, preferably as an Accounting Clerk or Data Entry Operator would be idealwould be a very ideal one. I should also have no problem working as a part-time Office Administrator, provided that the schedule I am offered does not conflictthe schedules, I am offered, do not conflict with my class scheduleschedules. Regarding my experience and skillsNow regarding my experience and skills, I have a fast typing speeda very good typing speed, and I am highly computer-literatevery much computer literate. Besides, I am also good at multitasking, and I can speak a little Frenchspeak little French, and I also haveother than having a high level of fluency in Englisha very good fluency in the English language.
I hope you willwould help me find a part-time job at your earliest convenienceas soon as possible. Thank you in advance. Yours faithfully, Zoe Laskari
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter fully covers the requested personal background, job preferences, and relevant skills, and its purpose remains clear throughout. Its main limitation is a combination of weak paragraphing and several awkward or imprecise expressions, including an unnecessarily casual reference to the GPA and unnatural phrasing around language ability. Organise the body by the three prompt points and use more natural, concise professional wording.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and all three bullet points are developed with relevant personal, job, and skills details.
Keep every detail professionally relevant and replace the casual comment about whether the GPA matters with a direct statement of its value.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses logically through the requested points, but nearly the entire letter is presented as one dense paragraph.
Use separate body paragraphs for the introduction, job preferences, and experience so the progression is immediately visible.
Lexical Resource
The letter shows sufficient range for employment and study topics, although several collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Use more natural phrases such as contact you, highly computer-literate, and speak a little French.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structures is used with generally clear meaning, despite several errors in articles, punctuation, and sentence construction.
Improve control of clause punctuation and noun phrases, especially in the sentence about schedules conflicting with classes.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter:
- introduce yourself
- explain what sort of job you would like
- say what experience and skills you have
Your response
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