You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - describe the piece of equipment you have seen - why having the same equipment would be useful for your company - offer your assistance in buying the equipment

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Sample Response

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Dear [Manager's Name],Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to recommend a piece of equipment for our company which I believe would be highly useful. I saw this equipment at another company when I attended a business meeting there about a week ago. The piece of equipment I am referring toThis useful piece of equipment, I am talking about, is a foldable whiteboard. Of course, we already have a large whiteboard in our meeting and conference room, but the problem with this large whiteboard is that it is really inconvenient to carry it to another room if we want to do ansome important presentation there. But, luckily, this whiteboard would solve that problem for us since we can always fold it and carry it anywhere withat ease. Besides, this foldable whiteboard can be disassembledbroken into pieces, Deletelike some furniture, which will make it easy for us to place it on surfaces of almost any sizealmost any kind or size of surface. And, this foldable whiteboard becomes like an average-sized briefcaseaverage size briefcase, about 24 inches long and 18 inches wide, after folding it. So, if you think that this foldable whiteboard could be a piece of useful equipment for our office, I would be more than happy to assist you in buying it. Yours faithfully, Jack Nicholas

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter fully addresses the purpose and all three bullet points with a clear explanation of the foldable whiteboard's practical value and an appropriately formal tone. Its main weakness is repetitive wording and a largely single-block presentation, while several collocations sound slightly unnatural; prioritise clearer paragraphing and more precise, varied phrasing to make the recommendation feel more polished and persuasive.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The purpose is immediately clear, all three bullet points are fully covered, and the equipment's benefits are developed with specific detail.

Next step

Use a more personal salutation appropriate for a known manager and make the offer of purchasing assistance slightly more specific.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The ideas progress logically from identification to benefits and assistance, although the response is presented as one dense block and uses several basic linking openings.

Next step

Organise the letter into distinct paragraphs for purpose, description and benefits, and assistance, while reducing sentence-initial linking words.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

The vocabulary is varied and relevant, but repeated uses of "foldable whiteboard" and awkward phrases such as "anywhere at ease" reduce precision.

Next step

Use accurate collocations such as "carry it with ease" and vary references to the equipment without sacrificing clarity.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

A good range of complex sentence forms is generally controlled, with only occasional awkward structures and unnecessary comma separation.

Next step

Refine clause boundaries and word order in the longer sentences so that complex ideas read more naturally.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:

- describe the piece of equipment you have seen

- why having the same equipment would be useful for your company

- offer your assistance in buying the equipment

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