A large company in your area plans either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend the money
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to sincerelyprofoundly thank your organisation for the decision to spend money to benefitspend money for the benefit of our community. I deeply appreciate your readiness to sponsor a local junior sports team or arrangeor alternatively arrange two open-air concerts. Needless to say, financial support forto a children's sports team will be notably advantageous for both the team and your business. With your sponsorship, the players could receivethey will surely get professionaladvanced training which will develop their potential in sports, and at the same timein parallel, promote your brand. Perhaps a fewPerhaps, a few of them will achieve success in professional competitionsbring glory in professional competitions in the future to make us proud as a community. On the other hand, arranging two open-air concerts is also a great idea as people will immensely enjoy the performancesperformance and some local bands would get the chance to show their talents. This could alsoIt certainly will promote our culture and heritage. I am positive that either of your initiatives will greatly benefit our communityserve our community greatly. However, supporting the local sports team has a more eminent result than escalating the music fans by sponsoring concerts, I believe. Concerts would be temporary entertainmententertainments for the local people, but support for the young athletesprovision for the young sportsmen will be remembered for a long timeremembered for a long and would give us many occasions to celebrate and be proud of. Once again thank you for a commendable initiative. Yours faithfully, Edward Jenkins
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter addresses all three requirements directly, uses an appropriately formal tone, and gives clear reasons for favouring the sports sponsorship. Its main limitation is imprecise wording in several otherwise ambitious phrases, which sometimes makes the comparison sound unnatural. Prioritise accurate collocations and a cleaner comparative sentence when explaining why the sports team offers more lasting value.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All bullet points are fully addressed with relevant benefits and a clear, supported recommendation.
Make the final comparison even more precise by explicitly linking the two-year sponsorship to sustained community benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas progress logically from appreciation through both options to a clear recommendation, with effective linking.
Use distinct paragraphs for the sports benefits, concert benefits, and recommendation to sharpen the letter's structure.
Lexical Resource
The letter shows a broad vocabulary, but several collocations and word choices are awkward or imprecise.
Replace expressions such as "more eminent result" and "escalating the music fans" with natural, precise alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex structures is used successfully, although a few comparative and sentence-boundary errors remain.
Revise the recommendation sentence to avoid the comma splice and form the comparison accurately.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
A large company in your area plans either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter:
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
Your response
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