Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country.
Sample Response
An advertisement is a branch of mass communication that provides information about the products and services offered by different companies as well as about a country's cultureas well as about country for its culture, society and geography. In my opinion apart from boosting the economy, it puts a multidimensional description of that area. I do agree that advertisement narrates much useful description about that region. In the modern era, advertisingIn modern era advertisement is a necessary tool to sell the products. Apart from its utility in boosting product salesenergising the sale of products, it has a lot of other benefitsa lot other benefits. ByJust observing advertisements for a few daysthe advertisements for few days one can estimate the amount of business, social norms, customscostumes, levels of education, language and history of a certain population group or nationpopulation group or of a nation. The involvement of a sports star in an advertisementInvolvement of any sports star in advertisement tells us that it is this nation's favourite sportit is the favourite sports of this Nation. Fashion magazines highlight garments that are in voguevague in that society. Scenes are filmed against the backdrop ofShooting of scenes is shown in background of historical places, hill-stations and tourist places. These clips provide information about those places. SomeFew advertisements are made only for the sake of promoting business. Actors are paid wellhigh for international tours and shooting is performed on world renowned places. The information in this type of advertisingThe information in this strategy is often exaggerated and linkedis mostly exaggerated and tried to be linked with culture and social norms of the community. In conclusion, an advertisement is a source of information for a persona source of knowledge to a person living there and also to people who see itpeople who are seeing it from other countries. This subgroup of mass communication is a good tool to get useful information about a particular country.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear agreement and offers several relevant ways advertising may reflect national life, including sport, clothing, language, and places. Its main limitation is that ideas are presented in one dense block and some examples are unclear or insufficiently connected to the claim, particularly the discussion of overseas filming. Organise the argument into paragraphs and explain fewer examples more precisely, including how each reveals the country being advertised.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported with several relevant examples, but development is uneven and some claims remain unclear or contradictory.
Select two or three strong examples and explicitly explain how each one reveals national culture or conditions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a broadly understandable sequence, but the absence of paragraphing and weak connections between some points impede progression.
Divide the response into an introduction, focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with one controlling idea per paragraph.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss advertising and national characteristics, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices limit precision.
Prioritise accurate common expressions and correct misused words such as costumes, vague, paid high, and narrates description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally recoverable, but frequent article, agreement, plural, and sentence-structure errors reduce grammatical control.
Edit each sentence for articles and countable nouns, then simplify passive and multi-clause structures that become awkward.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country.
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.