An increasing number of people work from home these days and stay in touch with their office using computer technology. What are the effects on employees of working from home?
Sample Response
Nowadays, thanks to advances in digital technologydevelopment in the cyber-space, some people are able to do their jobsjob from home. This method can be beneficial in several waysuseful in some aspects. I think they can not only save moneysave not only their money but they can improveraise their safety and improve their family relationships too. Obviously, these types of working arrangementsthis types of careers are far more economical thanfar economical than working in the office. Paying for public transportation tickets or fuel for private vehiclesprivate vehicle gas, people have to spend several hundred dollarsseveral hundreds of dollars each month to commute between their home and workplace; however, those working from home do not spend this money and can save it. For example, my brother, who works for a mobile company in Australia, has to pay almost $300 per month to travel from his apartment to his workplace located downtownlocated in downtown, while he would not pay it ifwhen his employer permitted him to work from home, and he would save over $3500 annually. Another reason is that this method is far safer than working in an officethan the working in the office. Had not many electronic engineers had to travel between their home and the company they are working, they would not have been injured or even died because of road accidents. Many of them have to use their private car to reach their destination, and unfortunately, because of road accidentssudden car accidents, their lives have been jeopardised. Lastly, this method can improve family relationships. Clearly, this group of employees usually spend more hours each daystay longer hours a day in their house and are definitely a longer time in contact with their spouse or children than the ones working outside the homeworking in the outside home. In this way, a friend of mine who his office is a room inside of his house can have closer communication with his children because he can monitor his children's activities, including their study or playing, and he is more familiar with his wife's personality than a similar personnel who have to work more than eight hours a day in his workplace. In conclusion, those working from home can gain more advantages than the ones working from the office. I believe that the former usually spend less money for their transportation, are harmed less by car accidents and have more mutual relations with their family members. It is a perfect plan if governments popularise this type of jobs fundamentally.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay directly addresses effects on employees and develops three relevant benefits—lower commuting costs, greater safety, and stronger family contact—with concrete examples. Its coverage is one-sided, however, and several examples are overstated or grammatically difficult, especially the inverted road-accident sentence. Add at least one credible disadvantage such as isolation or blurred boundaries, then simplify sentences and improve collocation and agreement accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Three positive effects are developed with examples, but the response does not consider negative effects and some claims are overstated.
Add a developed drawback such as isolation, reduced mentoring, or difficulty separating work and home life.
Coherence and Cohesion
The three-benefit sequence is clear, though some long sentences and repeated method/reason phrasing weaken flow.
Use one focused paragraph for financial effects and another that balances safety and social effects.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate topic vocabulary, but unnatural phrases such as raise safety and mutual relations recur.
Use improve safety, commute, work-life boundaries, and family relationships precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex forms are attempted, but agreement, comparatives, conditionals, and relative clauses frequently break down.
Prefer controlled clauses and check this/these, singular/plural agreement, and comparative structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
An increasing number of people work from home these days and stay in touch with their office using computer technology. What are the effects on employees of working from home?
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