Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of the environment, while others think this is the responsibility of the government. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
To commence with, the government plays a vital role in maintaining the environment, because it hassuch as it has the authority to make strict laws and regulations governing industrieslaws and regulations against the industries that pollute the environment. Furthermore, the government can encourage individuals to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels and educate them about the detrimental effects of these resources on the environmentthe detrimental effect on the environment of these resources by organising campaignsorganising the campaign in schools, colleges and communitiesat schools, colleges and societies.
On the other hand, It is irrefutable every inhabitant is a unique creature of nature. Therefore, it is the sole responsibility of every human being to take care of the environment. Normal people can reduce the utilisation of plastic objects that have a detrimental effect on their surroundings. Apart from this, the use of carsApart from this usage of cars emits carbon into the environment, which is athe greenhouse gas contributing to global warmingsequent in global warming. To mitigate this problem, they can switch to electric vehiclesshift their demand to electric vehicles and use public transport services rather than use their own vehiclesrather than own vehicles.
To recapitulate, however, the government can mitigategovernment mitigate the environmental problems by introducing legislation. OverallAlthough, the environment can be preserved in an effective way if both the government and the general public make joint efforts.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response is clearly organised around the two views and presents a definite opinion that joint action is most effective. However, at only 188 words, its relevant points are insufficiently developed, and several awkward grammatical constructions and word choices reduce precision. The highest priority is to add fuller explanation and concrete support for each side while maintaining accurate sentence structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and a clear opinion are presented, but the response is substantially under length and ideas receive limited development.
Extend each view with a clear consequence or example and explain why combined responsibility is preferable.
Coherence and Cohesion
The two viewpoints are separated logically, though linking is sometimes mechanical or incorrectly punctuated and the conclusion is awkwardly connected.
Use cohesive devices more selectively and build smoother links between claims, explanations, and the final opinion.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonably varied environmental vocabulary, despite several imprecise or unnatural lexical combinations.
Improve collocational accuracy when describing campaigns, vehicle choices, greenhouse gases, and environmental consequences.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but recurring errors with clauses, articles, agreement, and punctuation weaken control.
Review clause completeness and agreement, especially in sentences beginning with concessive or contrast markers.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of the environment, while others think this is the responsibility of the government. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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