Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
In present circumstances, there is a debate that the school programschool program should include compulsorycompulsary financial education or studyingstuding should be free. However, a free education systemfree education system, in my opinion, is the best approachtechnique in a developed societydeveloped society. Firstly, freeFree education is anthe effective way of teaching everyone. In some countries, however, financial education is compulsory, therefore 20 toor 30 percent of its population is semi - literate. For example, USA, nowadays 30 or 45 percent of its young generation cannot afford to study in universities or colledges. They think that despite paying huge tution fees, we can find a job and earn money. It is proven if country's education system faces like this kind of problems, developing of the country will decrease. It means this country cannot connect with the world. Moreover, there’s another factor we need to considerconsider about. In my opinion, the role of financial education is becominggetting more important but parentsthe parents are also important and have a responsibilityhave responsibility to teach their childrenchild how to manage moneyto learn how to manage the money. More than 70% of young people’s money comesmoney are come from their parents. In addition, it has to be considered that a student might become money-mind person, talking about money all the time in class or even in a public place. It can be harmful for some students and affect their normal social liveslife. In, Free eduacation is the best approach for students to get good lessonsa good lessons and save money for their future careerssave their money for their future career
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response offers a few potentially relevant concerns, especially the role of parents in teaching money management. Its central argument, however, repeatedly confuses mandatory financial education with paid versus free education, so the stated position does not directly answer the question and supporting claims are often unclear. The priority is to define financial education accurately, state a direct degree of agreement, and develop two relevant reasons with clear explanations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a position, but most of the argument addresses free education rather than whether financial education should be compulsory.
Answer the exact proposition directly and develop each reason around the benefits or drawbacks of teaching financial skills at school.
Coherence and Cohesion
A broad progression from education access to parental responsibility and social concerns is visible, but the links between ideas are often unclear and paragraphing is absent.
Organise the response into a clear introduction, separate body paragraphs for distinct reasons, and a focused conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary conveys some general ideas about education and money, but repetition, misspellings, and inaccurate collocations reduce precision.
Use a smaller set of accurate topic phrases such as financial literacy, budgeting skills, and household responsibility, while checking spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence forms, but frequent agreement, article, pronoun, and clause-structure errors sometimes make meaning difficult to follow.
Prioritise complete sentence structures and accurate subject-verb agreement before adding more complex clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.