The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.
Sample Response
Man, through the ages, has undergone many changes from the time when he depicted a herd of mammoths on the walls of his cave to these days when he can create beautiful pictures and even make coffee by use of computer technologies without leaving his favourite chair. The 20th century made great stridesmade huge steps in the development of computer technologiesin developing computer technologies and achieved many advancesreached many goals that made our liveslife much easier. What should we expect in the 21st century?
First of all, I think that the pace of our liveslife will speed up: we will move faster from one place to another, from one continent to another using high-speed jet aeroplanes. SecondlySecond of all, I believe that we will be able to do many things that take much time now without leaving our homeshouse. Computers will be everywhere including ourout clothes. Many people will have chips and mini computers inserted in their heads to store a large amount of informationhold a huge amount of information and have quick access to ithave a quick access to it.
But what will be the most amazing thing in the 21st century is the flights to the outer space and Mars that will be available to all people. Scientists say that Mars has many features similar to Earth'smany things similar to the Earth's. Moreover, they say that with the help of modern technology, people canmodern technology people can artificially create conditions that will allow people to live there on a permanent basison the constant basis.
Apart from that, computers will become more powerfulComputers would become more powerful and they will have superior artificial intelligence. We will have robots to do hazardous workthe hazardous works like mining and outer space research. Surprisingly, e-commerce would be in more convenient form and most of the people will purchase online rather than going to shops in person. In the field of education and jobs, dramatic changes will occurdramatic changes would happen. Online learning and freelancing would be very popular and people would be able to earn almost all of their desired degrees and diplomastheir desired degree and diploma from homestaying at home. Finally, cures for many deadly diseases will be developedthe cure for many deadly diseases would be invented and yet new diseases may spread to cause some deadly catastrophic results. To sum up, I am sure that many amazing changes will be brought by the 21st century. Furthermore, I think that with the help of the contemporary technologies people can do many things that were even difficult to imagine a century ago. So, nowadays it is rather difficult and even impossible to imagine all changes that will happen in the next decades.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response offers an imaginative range of predictions and gives its clearest development to faster travel, embedded computers, and space settlement. Its main limitation is that the later discussion becomes a rapid list of technology, commerce, education, work, and health changes, leaving several claims thinly supported. Prioritise selecting fewer predictions and developing each through a concrete example and clearer explanation of its likely impact.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The task is directly addressed with numerous relevant predictions and some detailed support, although later ideas are underdeveloped.
Choose fewer major changes and extend each one with a specific example and a clear consequence for everyday life.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a discernible progression and useful paragraphing, but the final body paragraph becomes crowded and list-like.
Divide the later predictions into related themes and place the conclusion in its own paragraph.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and often topic-specific, though several collocations and word forms are unnatural.
Refine phrases such as 'made huge steps', 'hazardous works', and 'earn a degree' to improve lexical precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is attempted successfully, but recurring article, preposition, agreement, and tense inconsistencies reduce control.
Keep predictions consistently in the future form and proofread countable nouns and articles, especially 'access', 'work', and 'space'.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.
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