Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Throughout the 21st century, a lot of significant global events have happened at different locations. Sports, which is played among nations, is one such event which is becoming extremely popular, especially among young peoplethe youngsters of the developed nations. The question of whether or notThe discussion that whether or not to host an international sporting eventprogram by a nation is advantageous is a debatable one, with strong argumentslogics provided by the supporters of both viewsboth the views. On the one hand, a sense of patriotism will increase amongwill be increased among the citizens of the hosthosting country due to the fact that they will be proud to see their country in the international headlines duringheadlines, during the entire event. In addition to that, the nation's top leaders have an opportunity to present the prizehand over the price to the winners. For example, in 2005 when Brazil hosted the soccer world cup, every day the name 'Brazil' was seen in almost all media such as newspapersmedia like newspapers, televisiontelevisions and the internet. Secondly, motivation will be cultivated among young people in the host countrythe youths of the host country, and will actively try to play the game locally. This can develop the sporting potentialbring up the sporting potential of the citizens and later help to play for the nation. For instance, the proportion of citizens playing cricket increased by 10 percent after India hosted the Cricket World CupIndia hosted cricket world cup in 2000. Thus, a country can have many athletes to choose from and select the best onesmany sportsmen in the pool and pick the best ones. On the other hand, there are security threats especially from terrorists or opponentsfrom the terrorists or by opponents from the start to the end of the program. A lot of money needs to be spent to deploy the military forces, round the clock, to ensure that the nation is completely under control. In 2005, Brazil spent 25 million dollars to ensure that the country is secure in all aspects. Moreover, this money could be used for the starving people, especially in Africa. Thus, some people gravitate towards this point of view. In conclusion, although I understand that huge money needs to be spent for safety purposes, I totally agree that hosting international sporting events are advantageous for both - the hosting country and the attending countries. There should be regular sporting events held internationally every year, to promote peace and love.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay discusses both perspectives, maintains a clear opinion, and organises its main ideas into an easy-to-follow argument. Its strongest feature is the relevant coverage of national pride, participation, security, and public spending, although some examples are questionable and several expressions are unnatural. Prioritise more credible support and edit recurring collocation and grammatical errors to make the argument more authoritative.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed and the writer's favourable position is clear, with relevant reasons and examples supporting the discussion.
Use accurate, verifiable examples and explain more directly why the stated benefits outweigh the financial and security costs.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is logically organised into clear stages, and cohesive devices guide the reader effectively despite some mechanical sequencing.
Reduce formulaic transitions such as 'Secondly' and repeated uses of 'Thus' by making the logical connections emerge more naturally from each paragraph's reasoning.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range to discuss the topic precisely, but frequent awkward collocations such as 'strong logics', 'hand over the price', and 'motivation will be cultivated' limit control.
Replace unnatural word combinations with standard academic phrasing, such as 'strong arguments', 'present the prize', and 'encourage young people to participate'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures, but recurring errors in agreement, articles, and clause construction are noticeable even though meaning remains clear.
Check agreement and sentence subjects carefully, especially in forms such as 'sport is played', 'young people will try', and 'hosting events is advantageous'.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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