Some people prefer activities and lifestyles in hot climates while others prefer living in cold climates. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
As we have entered the 21st centuryentered in 21st era, everyso each and every aspect has been changingtransforming due to changes in lifestylesLifestyle. Moreover, today’s most controversial issue is about Lifestyle in a different climate, many people believe that it’s good to live in a hot climate while sceptical hold’s the view that activities and Lifestyle in a cold climate are far better. Therefore, I will examinewould shed light upon both perspectives and also discuss my view in the following paragraphsin upcoming paragraphs.
To begininaugurate with, there are some benefits of living in a hot climatepositive grounds of living in the hot climate. First and foremost, days are longer in summer than in winterdays are long in summer as compared to winter so people can utiliseso that people can utilise their time effectively, for example, people wake up in the early morning to farmto do farming and other work in the presence of sunlight till evening. Secondly, usually in summerin summers usually, less electricity is consumedthere is less consumption of electricity because during office hoursin-office hours people prefer to open windows to let sunlight enterto allow enter sunlight so that they use sunlight instead of artificial light.
On the other hand, many people believe living in a cold climateliving in winter has more benefits. Initially, usually in winters, there are different varietiesvariety of food available so that people enjoy eatingenjoy to eat a variety of foods. Furthermore, in winters night are long, so people enjoy the nightlife in their city, the example is given: In Shimla after 6 p.m. all streets are shining very well that, attracts tourists and give them pleasure moment by showing the beauty of their city through lights.
To sum up, while keeping my pencil down, I must write that it depends upon one’s preference to live in a hot or cold climate. However, in my opinionBut, In my opinion, summers are better because it’s less dangerous for heart patients and also in summer most of the work is done in sunlight so less consumption of electricity.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its clear four-paragraph structure, which allows both climate preferences and the writer’s opinion to be identified easily. However, the supporting ideas are uneven and sometimes implausible, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors make expression awkward. The highest priority is to develop each view with a convincing, directly relevant explanation and then edit sentences for agreement, articles, and natural word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are discussed and a clear preference is given, but several reasons are simplistic, weakly supported, or introduced only in the conclusion.
Develop one convincing benefit for each climate and support the final preference with reasoning established in the body.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear paragraph sequence, although linking is often formulaic and some long sentences lose smooth progression.
Use fewer stock signposts and separate run-on sentences so each reason and example follows its claim clearly.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient for the topic and shows some range, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce naturalness.
Replace forced expressions with precise everyday academic combinations and check plural forms, possession, and verb patterns.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is an attempt to use varied complex structures, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, clauses, and punctuation remain noticeable.
Prioritise complete sentence boundaries and subject–verb agreement before adding complex subordinate clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people prefer activities and lifestyles in hot climates while others prefer living in cold climates. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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