Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?
Sample Response
It's quite interesting as well as amusing at the same time, discussing this topic. If we think back to the 1980sremember back in the 80th, we were still very much attachedwe still very much attached to a conventional letter or postal mail. It took weeks or even monthsweeks even months before a single letter arrived at a destination. But in the 1990s90th, the speed of communication increased dramaticallythe way people communicate accelerated to a profound degree. The Internet not only allowed people to send and receive messages across countries atin the speed of light, but it also managed to reduce the high costcut the expensive cost that had previously been a constraint on communicationwhich previously part of communication constraint.
NowadaysIn present days, even home telephone devices are collecting dustdusk. Smartphones, tablets, laptops and notebooksSmartphone, tablet, laptop and notebooks havehad overtaken those "primaeval" devices. People found that applications such as WhatsApp and BlackBerry Messengerapplication like Whatsapp, Blackberry messenger, make it easier for them to interactease their way to interact with each other. In fact, text messaging took its turn to become obsolete. We also shouldn't neglect the power of social media, which has emerged as a powerful toolwhich escalated as a powerful tool for political communication. Current American President, who once remarked this, had successfully gained followers to help him winwon the presidential election.
But the internet has several negative sides as well. Instant Messenger, for instance, has been blamedhad been pointed as a scapegoat for making youngsters becomemaking youngster became more "autistic" because it involves physical inactivitydue to its nature in physical inactivity. When distance no longer an issue in interaction and having gadget in hand, it is all that it takes to start mingling with your peers. Not to mention, these days news related to social media's crime scene had brought horror to certain people. It also pledged guilty as the predisposition factor for increasing numbers of infidelity and divorce among the couple.
So as the internet has brought a lot of advantages to human civilisation and had triumphantly change the way we communicate, the cons inevitably followed as its consequences. Thus, we all shall take precaution with it.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response gives relevant examples of faster digital communication and follows a recognizable paragraph structure. However, its position on the extent of agreement is only implicit, and the discussion of social harms drifts from the exact question; frequent grammatical and collocational errors also reduce clarity. The highest priority is to state a direct position and develop only points that show how far the internet makes communication easier.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response explains several ways the internet facilitates communication, but its degree of agreement remains unclear and much of the negative discussion is tangential.
State a precise extent of agreement and ensure every body paragraph directly evaluates whether online communication has become easier.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear paragraphing and a generally chronological-to-thematic progression support readability, although some links are mechanical and several sentences connect ideas unclearly.
Use focused topic sentences and arrange supporting details so each paragraph advances one clear claim about communication.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a reasonably broad range of vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices sometimes obscure meaning.
Prefer accurate, natural expressions over ambitious combinations such as figurative or technical phrases whose usage is uncertain.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are attempted, but recurrent errors in tense, agreement, articles, verb patterns, and missing clause elements reduce control.
Revise sentences systematically for a finite verb, correct agreement, consistent tense, and necessary articles before adding complex structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?
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