In some countries, using the internet in school is getting popular. Is it positive or negative development?
Sample Response
It is widely acceptedan irresistible fact that over the past few decades the world has witnessed the rapid strides in technology, especially in the field of education, as it has been seen that use of the internetutilisation of internet has expanded in schoolsamong the schools in many countries. In my opinion, it has both both positive and negative effects, but overall it is positive if supervisedpositive and negative developments and effects. While One positive aspect is thatspotlighting the positive development, I can say that it is highly imperative for today's pupils to know aboutthat they know about the new technology in this competitive epoch. So, to allow the internet in school can play a key role in the development of a student. By knowing the advantages of the internet, young studentsthe young students can comprehend any concept of study which is not understood by them in classrooms. For verification, it is illustrated that the students who are familiar with using the internetwell recognised with internet usage in school time, do not usually face the inconvenience in further life. On the contrary, in spite of the internet being such helpful in school, its drawbacks cannot be overlooked. It is likely that the pupils can be overdependent on the internet. It can reduceswallow the direct interaction between students and teachersteacher. For instance, there are many websites on the internet with which students can attend any lecture for their classstudents can attend any lecture of his class through the internet while sitting at home. As a result, they may make it a habitSo he or she probably make it a habit and as to he or she can give preference to the online methods of study. Furthermore, there is no guarantee thatthere is surety that every student would use this technology in a positive way. So far I have written to be concluded that it is in the hands of school authoritiesin the hand of the school department to make the positive development of usage of internet in school. They should allow the students to use the internet to such an extent that it cannot impact the practical knowledge and interaction of the students with teacher.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response considers both educational benefits and risks of school internet use, and it reaches a broadly understandable conclusion about controlled access. However, the position is not sharply established at the start, while absent paragraphing and recurring language errors weaken clarity. State a precise judgement in the introduction, organise benefits and risks into separate paragraphs, and use shorter, more accurately controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both benefits and drawbacks of internet use in schools and gives a position, but the view is not sharply framed as positive, negative, or balanced until the end.
State your judgement clearly in the introduction, then make each body paragraph prove one part of that judgement with a specific school-based example.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a basic progression from advantages to disadvantages to conclusion, but paragraphing is absent and some links are mechanical or unclear.
Use separate paragraphs and topic sentences: one for educational benefits, one for risks, and one conclusion with your final position.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient for the topic, but several word choices are unnatural or imprecise, which weakens academic tone.
Replace memorised phrases with direct academic wording, such as internet access, classroom learning, supervision, and overdependence.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is mostly clear, but article use, subject-verb agreement, and sentence control errors occur regularly.
Revise long sentences into shorter clauses and check each noun phrase for articles and plural forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some countries, using the internet in school is getting popular. Is it positive or negative development?
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