In the past, buildings often reflected the culture of a society but today all modern buildings look alike and cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. What do you think is the reason for this, and is it a good thing or a bad thing?
Sample Response
Historic architectureHistorical architectures symbolizesemblem the cultural heritage of a society and serve as a source of attraction and inspiration for residents and touriststhe dwellers and tourists. The uniqueness of buildings in urban areas is gradually being replacedis gradually replaced by standardized construction designsstandard construction stencils and cities all over the globe are becoming identical. This essay will analyse some reasons for this convergence and will provide an opinion on this practice.
With the advent of modern equipment, machinery and following similar standards of construction, metropolitan reveal a great deal of similarities in the architecture of buildings. This is primarily due to the increased land price where builders find it more economical to erect a building than to construct one unit housing scheme. Another reason is to provide inhabitants with athe similar lifestyle. For instance, multipurpose shopping malls in Karachi and Lahore have similar structuresstructure featuring parking spacesspace, food courts, and ticket vending machinesticket vending machines and so on. Moreover, governments are adopting similar planning and construction modelsfootprints to ensure all housing schemes, multipurpose complexescomplex, offices and so on are developed according to modern layoutsare developed on modern layouts to save the environment from pollution, protect residents from natural hazardsprotect natives from furies of mother nature and so on.
However, these modern practices come up with their own challenges can be rated good or bad for cities. Arguments in their favour are thatLaudable arguments are that tourists feel at hometourist feels homely, and people have the same services and lifestylespeople have same services and lifestyle. On the other hand, these advancements are damaging the cultural heritage and iconic features that make a city stand outfeatures of a city which stands out in the world and are eroding its distinctivenessare taking away its pride and inimitability.
To conclude, modern construction practices have resulted in marvels and transformed metropolitan areasrevamped the metropolitans. In my opinion, it is a good thing, but proper measures should be taken by the government to preserve the historic architecture and sights of a city.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response addresses both causes and evaluation, and its broad paragraph structure keeps the main line of argument recognisable. However, the judgment that standardisation is beneficial is only briefly asserted, while frequent awkward collocations and grammatical faults reduce precision and fluency. The highest-priority improvement is to develop the positive evaluation with a specific explanation and example, then edit sentences for agreement, articles, and complete clause structure.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Relevant reasons are presented and a positive overall judgment is stated, but the evaluation is brief and only partly developed.
Explain why the benefits outweigh the cultural loss and support that judgment with a specific, fully developed example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a discernible progression and clear paragraph purposes, although some internal links are loose and the evaluation paragraph is compressed.
Organise the evaluative paragraph around one developed benefit and one clearly contrasted drawback before reaching the final judgment.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of topic vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace forced expressions such as construction stencils and tourist feels homely with simple, accurate architectural and social vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but recurring agreement, article, plural, and clause-structure errors weaken control.
Prioritise complete clause construction and subject-verb agreement, then check articles and singular-plural forms in every sentence.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In the past, buildings often reflected the culture of a society but today all modern buildings look alike and cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. What do you think is the reason for this, and is it a good thing or a bad thing?
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