Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children, while others think parents need not do that, as children can read books, watch TV or movies by themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
Parents take care of their children at every step. While some people believe that parents should read or tell children different storiesteach children different stories, others believe that parents should not get involved in thatshould not involve in that as children have the ability to understand and analyse those stories and lessons by themselves.
There are many benefits of teaching children by parents on stories. Children can understand stories by reading themselves, but not up to the level as older people can. As they grow up their ability to analyse will also increasetheir analysing ability also will increase. Hence if parents helpmake them understand stories by reading and explaining themby reading and translating, they can understand much better. Not only that, if children start reading and watching stories by themselves, there is a possibility of misunderstanding the concept of stories especially moral stories(If Moral stories), and also a possibilityand also possibility of choosing the unsuitable programmes and storiesbad programs and stories by themselves. For instance, olderold people always advise parents to teach children good moral stories, which help them develop and understand human valueswhich are used for them to improve and understand the values of a human being.
However, some people believe that parents should not always guide children at every stepalways hold children for each and every step, as they read books, watch TV, so have the ability to understand the stories by reading themselves. People say that there are a lot of differences between today’s children and children in the pastdifferences in today’s children compared to older days. It is evidentproved that today’s childrenthese day’s children have the ability to understand situationsunderstand the situations and act according to that, they not only read stories but also can teach otherscan teach to others. For example, in today’s schools, children who have just started schoolschooling can learn and engageinvolve in multiple tasks much faster than their parents.
To sum up, though today’s children have the ability to analyse situations and stories much better, it is always the responsibility of parents to monitor how welllook after on how well they understand themit. It depends on each child, how good they analyse.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response addresses both views in a clear four-paragraph structure and maintains a generally discernible preference for parental guidance. Its main limitation is that supporting ideas are sometimes repetitive or asserted through vague examples, while frequent awkward constructions reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop each viewpoint with a specific, logically explained consequence and then express that reasoning in more natural sentence patterns.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed and an opinion is given, but several ideas and examples remain general or only partly developed.
Explain one specific benefit or risk for each view through a clear cause-and-effect chain and make the final position more decisive.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses through appropriate paragraphs, although some sentence links are repetitive or logically loose.
Use referencing and carefully chosen transitions to connect each claim to its explanation instead of relying on formulaic linking phrases.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss the topic, but inaccurate collocations and word choices recur throughout the response.
Replace awkward phrases with natural combinations such as guide children, become involved, and understand situations independently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors with articles, agreement, clause structure, and word forms reduce control.
Prioritise accurate subject-verb agreement and complete clause structures, then proofread each complex sentence for missing articles and prepositions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children, while others think parents need not do that, as children can read books, watch TV or movies by themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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