The environmental problems that today’s world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So governments and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
In the contemporary era, environmental problems seriouslymajorly affect people. So governments, environmentalists should have responsibility for addressing environmental issuesthe responsibility to curb the environmental issues and try to reduce further damage. I will totally disagree with the above-mentioned statement and will discuss my points in subsequent paragraphs.
To commence with, there are several reasons behind it. First of all, it is worth considering that these problems may directly affect people’s healththe health of the person. For instance, polluting gasesseveral gases and pollution may pollutedeplete the air, which can further contaminate the water. These gases remain in the air for a prolonged period of time and cause different types of pollution. In additionIn addition to it, the air is inhaled by people. When polluted air is inhaledWhen depleted air goes inside, it causes serious health complications and causes diseasetriggers the disease. Similarly with water, when people drink contaminated water, this also raises huge problems which can lead to even death. India is a countrymerely a country where a large amount of pollutionan abundant amount of pollution is produced and emitted, which can ultimately deplete the ozone layerlead to depleting the ozone layer and is one of the main causes of global warmingone of the main reasons cause global warming.
Illustrating further, ordinary people are not only responsible for this but also the duty of large organizations to aware people by doing some campaigns, Survey about environmental problems. Moving ahead, Large organizationsVarious huge organizations and governmental bodies should collaborateshould have to collaborate with individuals to protect trees and forestssave trees, forests in order to prevent deforestation. GovernmentsGovernment should also make regulations and stringent guidelines to prevent environmental problemsfor preventing an environmental problem. If any person infringes the regulations, then he/she will be strictly penalized.
To recapitulate, it can be deduced that it should not merely be the responsibility of ordinary people but also the responsibility of big organizations and governments to take certain steps and initiatives to address such issuesbanish and curb such issues.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response has a clear paragraph structure and shows a useful range of environmental vocabulary, but its stated total disagreement is not consistently supported: much of the discussion explains pollution’s health effects, while the conclusion advocates shared responsibility. The highest priority is to build each body paragraph around what ordinary people can do versus what governments and organisations must do, maintaining one precise position throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A position is stated, but it becomes inconsistent and is only partly developed because a substantial section discusses pollution’s effects rather than responsibility for solutions.
Directly compare the capacity of individuals with that of governments and large organisations, then sustain the same degree of agreement through the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is organised into clear paragraphs and has broadly understandable progression, though linking phrases are often mechanical or inaccurately used.
Replace formulaic transitions such as ‘Illustrating further’ and ‘Moving ahead’ with explicit logical links between the claims.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient topic vocabulary and some less common language, but frequent collocational and word-form errors reduce precision and naturalness.
Prioritise accurate combinations such as ‘raise awareness’, ‘run campaigns’, and ‘polluted air’ instead of forcing less familiar wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts a mix of sentence forms, but frequent errors in clause structure, agreement, articles, and complementation sometimes make relationships difficult to follow.
Practise constructing complete parallel clauses, especially with ‘not only...but also’, before adding complex modifiers or transitions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The environmental problems that today’s world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So governments and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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