Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
Sample Response
Schools are designed to educate new members of society. This education includes science, culture and rights. Today's schools do not assignarrange students to different classes based on their behaviourfor their behaviours.
In my opinion, it would be effective to create separate classesefficient to make discrete classes based on students' conductaccording to students' moods and behaviours. There are many reasons not to groupreasons for not to group disobedient and well-behaved studentswell-mannered ones. One of them is the discrimination that makes to feel anxiety. The noisy children will worry about their identitypersonality when we divide students into such groups. They will probably think their personal identity is inadequate to spend time with others and study together. And it is likely to appear the disbelief to themselves, thus it is a big threat to society. Secondly, because of this discrimination, they will not pay sufficient attention to their lessons, in which they already perform poorlylessons which are not enough good now too. This may cause harm their future education and careersthe failure of their forthcoming future and career. It can also causeIt can be also the reason for the development of personality problemsthe creation of personality distortion and even the existence of bad-intended criminals in the future.
Nonetheless, it does not mean that schools should allow the actions of disruptive students. Schools have to be strict about these kinds of actionsthis kind of actions and must not allow these students to disrupt other students' learningdistract the successful students. To prevent this type of disruptiondistractions there are some disciplinary measures in most schoolsprecautions at most schools. The discipline systems are exactly for these actions. For example, if any student disturbs their classmates or interrupts their teacher, this student is suspended from schoolsuspended from the school for a while. Thus, students can understand the value of respecting school rulesgrasp the value of their school.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response’s strongest idea is that schools can discipline disruptive behaviour without segregating students, and it attempts to explain the psychological and academic harm that separate classes could cause. Its main limitation is a contradictory opening position—initially calling separate classes efficient before arguing against them—followed by no conclusion, while frequent language errors blur several claims; prioritise an unambiguous thesis, a matching conclusion, and clearer development of realistic consequences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay develops reasons against segregation and proposes discipline as an alternative, but the stated position is contradictory and never clarified in a conclusion.
State clearly from the outset that disruptive students should remain integrated, then conclude by reaffirming that discipline and support are preferable to separate classes.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognisable progression from possible harms to an alternative policy, but the contradictory thesis and several unclear links weaken coherence.
Use one paragraph for the harms of segregation and one for school-based alternatives, with explicit links between each claim and its consequence.
Lexical Resource
There is some relevant vocabulary for discrimination, discipline, identity, and suspension, but frequent unnatural combinations make the argument imprecise.
Replace phrases such as “disbelief to themselves,” “failure of their forthcoming future,” “personality distortion,” and “bad-intended criminals” with direct, conventional wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex sentences are attempted, but frequent infinitive, article, agreement, word-order, and clause-structure errors regularly strain clarity.
Practise controlled forms such as “reasons not to group,” “causes them anxiety,” “their lessons are already weak,” and “this kind of action.”
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
Your response
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