It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents like sport or music but others are not. however, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. discuss both the views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
There is no doubt that some people are born with certain talents like sport or music but it doesn’t mean that others cannot be successful in these fields. Howeverhowever, any person can achieve success in these areas through their dedicationwith his dedication and hard work.hard work. It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents like
It is certainly true that luck matters much in the life of every person.but some people are born with their luck. Forfor instance, Sachin Tendulkar started playing cricket duringin his childhood. he had many friends who accompaniedaccompany him in this sport. However, among them, onlybut among them, only Sachin Tendulkar distinguished himselfcame out with bright colors and at presentin present time he reached the peak of his caree r. furthermore, we can give the example of famous Sufi singer Satinder Sartaj who reached the top position of the Punjabi music industry at a very young age. It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents like
Although some people born with special talents we cannot deny dedication and hard work. Anyany person who struggles in his life and gives their full effortgives a hundred percent to their desired taskhis desire task cancould attain success in sport or musicboth fields. Forfor example, my cousin Simranjeet Singh Kahlon, whoKahlonwho washas born in a middle-class family and has now becomebut now he became an IAS officer with his hard work. furthermore, we can give the example of well-known singer Gurdas Mann who was born in a small village Giderbaha and became a star performer and an actor in the music and film industry. It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents like
In conclusion, whether some people born with some special features yet we can’t ignore the importance of struggle and hard work which matters most in everybody’s life. It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents like
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response has a recognisable position and paragraph structure, and it attempts to support both views with examples. However, much of the reasoning is only loosely connected to innate sporting or musical talent, one example is off-topic, and repeated copied fragments severely disrupt development and clarity. The highest priority is to remove all prompt repetition, then build two directly relevant arguments that explain how natural ability and training each affect success.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and an opinion are identifiable, but the arguments are weakly developed and several examples do not directly address sporting or musical ability.
Use one relevant example for innate talent and one for successful training, explaining explicitly how each supports the discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Basic paragraphing separates the main positions, but repeated copied fragments, abrupt sentence boundaries, and mechanical linking undermine progression.
Delete the repeated task wording and connect each paragraph's sentences through a clear claim, explanation, and example sequence.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough vocabulary to express its main message, but repetition, awkward word choices, and spelling errors substantially reduce precision.
Replace vague or inaccurate phrases with topic-specific language about aptitude, coaching, practice, and achievement.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in sentence boundaries, capitalization, verb forms, articles, and clause structure reduce clarity, although the main meaning is often recoverable.
Focus first on writing complete sentences with correct subject-verb forms and capital letters after full stops.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents like sport or music but others are not. however, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. discuss both the views and give your own opinion.
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