In some countries, only a few young people go to classical music concerts or play classical music. Why? Should young people be encouraged to attend and learn more?
Sample Response
In some places, only a limited number of young people attend classical music concerts or play this kind of music. In my opinion, the reason for this isthe reason for this comes from changing musical tastes among young peoplethe change in young people’s taste of music, and it is not necessary to encourage them to learn classical music.
Contemporary musicMusic nowadays includes diverse genresis diverse in genres, and classical music no longer has the same dominant role as it did in the pastdominant role like in the past. In fact, most young people nowthe majority of young people now prefer contemporary genrespay attention to trendy music types, such as rock, pop and hip hop, whileand many consider classical music to be a thing of the past. Consequently,This is the reason why they havefind no interest in either attending classical music concerts or learning to play this genre of music.
In addition, it is not necessary to encourage young people to find out more about classical music since it brings little practical value to their daily lives. The knowledge about classical music offers little benefit tocontributes almost nothing to most young people’s studies or careersmost young people’s study and career, and spending time learning it may therefore be unproductivetherefore spending time learning it can be a waste of time. In terms of entertainment, many young people now find it more enjoyable listening to pop, rock or R&B rather than classical music. Encouraging them to find out about something that does not interest themwhat is not of their interest may produce only reluctance and no positive resultsbring no positive results but just reluctance.
In conclusion, the major reason why only a few young people attend classical music concerts or play music in this genreplay this music genre is the change in their taste of music. I also believe there is no need to encourage them to learn more about classical music due to the little value it brings.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is strongest in its clear position and straightforward organisation, with both questions answered and the reasoning easy to follow. Its main limitation is that the explanation relies on broad assertions about changing tastes and practical value, without probing possible cultural or educational benefits. The highest-priority improvement is to develop each central claim with a more specific example or a fuller explanation of its consequences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are answered with a clear, consistent position and relevant ideas, although support remains fairly general.
Develop the reasons with specific examples and address a plausible benefit of classical music before rejecting encouragement.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically through a clear introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a concise conclusion.
Use more varied internal linking so relationships between claims feel less dependent on repeated causal phrases.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied and topic-appropriate, though several collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Replace phrases such as finding no interest and being of their interest with more natural academic collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence structures is used with generally good control and only occasional non-impeding errors.
Refine comparative and gerund constructions, particularly formulations such as finding it more enjoyable listening.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some countries, only a few young people go to classical music concerts or play classical music. Why? Should young people be encouraged to attend and learn more?
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