The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017.
Sample Response
The bar chart illustrates the number of adults participating in various major sportssport in one area between 1997 and 2017.units majored by numbers. Overall, while tennis showed the highest numberamount of participants among the otherother7 sports in both years, cricket experiencedexperenced a dramatic fall over the 20-year period.dramatical fall on the 10. Years period. Tennis figures represented a moderate surgerepresent a moderately surge from 50 to 55 thousand participants,subjects, moving on to basketball, the figure climbed sharply from under 10 thousand to over 20 thousand participants,just over 10 to nearly 21 participant, on the other hand cricketCricket recorded a dramaticdramatical decline in the number of participants, falling from around 26 thousand to approximately 7 thousand.participants number starting from 25 ending at only 7 recpectively. Furthermore, a slight increase was recorded in golf participationhad been recorded in the golf participant from just over 30 to 33. In contrast swimming figure remainedswimmming figure remains the same, standing at 35 thousand. Both football and rugbysame, standing at 35. both Football and Rugby follow a similar trend, by soaring up considerably. Regarding football, the number of participants wentRegarding of Football the number of participants goes up from approximately 31 to 48, likewise, rugby rose from 33 thousand to 49 thousand participants.likewise, Ruugby rose from 32 to 49 participants.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response successfully covers all major categories in the chart and provides a clear overview highlighting key trends. However, its effectiveness is reduced by significant inaccuracies in data scaling, as figures are given in single digits instead of thousands, along with an incorrect timeframe reference. To achieve a higher score, ensure exact measurement units are used and eliminate frequent grammar, spelling, and sentence-structure errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key trends are identified, but data units are completely miscalculated by omitting the 'in thousands' scale and misstating the period as a 10-year gap instead of 20 years.
Always check axis labels carefully to include the correct measurement scale (e.g., thousands) and double-check timeframes.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized into distinct paragraphs with basic signposting, though logical progression is hampered by abrupt sentence structures and inaccurate reference words.
Group related data points systematically into logical paragraphs and use cohesive devices more accurately to link ideas smoothly.
Lexical Resource
A basic range of vocabulary related to trend description is attempted, but noticeable spelling mistakes and awkward phrasing occur throughout.
Focus on correct spelling of key terms and avoid inaccurate word choices like 'dramatical' or describing participants as 'subjects'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammatical errors are frequent, including punctuation faults, faulty tense usage, and incomplete sentence fragments like the opening line's ending.
Practice constructing clear simple and complex sentences, ensuring proper subject-verb agreement and correct prepositions.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017.
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