The graph below shows the average temperature in Antarctica in June 2015.
Sample Response
The line graph showsshows data on the average daily temperature inof Antarctica in June 2015. The temperature is shown in degrees Celsius forgiven in centigrade by the dates of the month. OverallAs can be seen, the temperature fluctuated between approximately minus 60 and minus 50 degrees Celsiusfrom minus 50 to minus 60 degree centigrade. According to the graphillustration, Antarctica’s temperature on 1 Juneon the first June was as low as minus 60 degrees Celsiusminus 60-degree centigrade and over the following weekin a week, this temperature went up. On the seventh day of the month, the temperature reachedreached to -54 degrees Celsius-54 degree. On 9th June it stood at just below -53 degree and in the next 4 days, it became -57. In mid-JuneIn the mid-June, the temperature in Antarctica was approximately minus 56 degrees Celsiuswas recorded around minus 58 degree. After that, the temperature slightly increased and on 21st June it rose to -50 degree approximately. From this point, the temperature continued to fallkept on falling before reachingbefore reaching to -58 on 29th June. On the last day of the month, Antarctica’s temperature was around -57 degree centigrade which was almost the same as it was on the 3rd day of the month.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is strongest in tracing the month's temperature changes chronologically and identifying the approximate overall range and late-June high. Its main limitation is data precision, as several dates and values are only loosely or incorrectly matched to the graph, while the overview remains basic. Prioritise checking plotted points carefully and summarising the two rises and intervening falls more distinctly.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response gives a relevant chronological account and identifies the broad range, but several readings, including those for 9 June and the final comparison with 3 June, are inaccurate.
Check each selected point against the axes and provide a sharper overview of the two main peaks and subsequent declines.
Coherence and Cohesion
The chronological sequence is easy to follow and linking is generally effective, but presenting the whole report as one paragraph limits clarity.
Place the overview in its own paragraph and divide the detailed chronology into early-to-mid and late-month periods.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient to describe movement and approximation, though repetition and awkward collocations such as "reached to" reduce precision.
Use accurate combinations such as "reached minus 54 degrees," "rose to," "fell to," and "remained around".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response shows some sentence variety and remains clear, but recurring errors with dates, prepositions, articles, and degree forms weaken accuracy.
Edit expressions such as "on 1 June," "minus 60 degrees Celsius," and "reached minus 58 degrees" for consistent grammatical control.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the average temperature in Antarctica in June 2015.
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