The tables and pie chart show in percentage terms of the results of a survey of a new shopping complex in Auckland, New Zealand.
Sample Response
The tables show the levels of satisfactionsatisfaction level of survey participants withabout the quality of shops and restaurants of a new shopping plaza in Auckland, New ZealandZeland while the pie chart depicts how satisfied they were withabout the design of this shopping complex. Overall, more men were satisfied with the restaurantsthought that the restaurant was good than women were, whilethan that of females while a majority of the shoppers said that they liked the design of this mall. According to the given visualsillustration, around half of the male respondentsmale survey takers were satisfied with the quality of the shops while 17% of them were very satisfied. On the other hand, over two-thirds of the females said that they were either satisfied or veryquite satisfied with the stores. Exactly oneOne-fifth of the males and females were dissatisfied with the shops. Turning toNow regarding the restaurants, more than half of the male respondents reportedmales opined that they were satisfied with them while one in four male respondentsa male out of four was very satisfiedmore than satisfied. The objection level of the men about the restaurant was quite ignorable, only 5% to be precise, and this percentage was slightly less than one-fourth of the dissatisfied females with the restaurant quality. A few participants did not comment on the shopping complex's shop and dining quality which ranges from 9 to 20 percentages for males and females. More than six participants out of every ten expressed their satisfaction with the design of this shopping mall while exactly 17% were very contented about it. One in every ten people did not comment on the design while a very similar proportion of people showed their dissatisfactions.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its generally accurate coverage of the figures, including the main gender contrasts and the dominant positive reaction to the design. Its main limitation is that all information is compressed into one paragraph and several awkward or imprecise expressions weaken clarity. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the report into clear overview and detail paragraphs while using the chart labels and comparisons more precisely.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and accurately reports most key figures and gender differences, though the overview could identify the contrasting shop and restaurant patterns more fully.
Make the overview more comprehensive by summarising both major gender contrasts and retain the exact response categories used in the visuals.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information follows a sensible sequence from shops to restaurants and design, but the single-paragraph presentation and some awkward referencing reduce cohesion.
Separate the introduction, overview, and grouped detail comparisons into distinct paragraphs with clearer links between related figures.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient range of vocabulary describes satisfaction and comparison, but several unnatural collocations and word-form choices reduce precision.
Replace phrases such as “objection level,” “20 percentages,” and “showed their dissatisfactions” with natural statistical language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with generally clear meaning, although comparison, agreement, and noun-form errors recur.
Proofread comparative structures and agreement carefully, especially in sentences combining several categories or groups.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The tables and pie chart show in percentage terms of the results of a survey of a new shopping complex in Auckland, New Zealand.
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