The table and pie chart illustrates populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.
Sample Response
The pie chartThe given pie chart shows the percentages of people from different nationalitiesthe percentage of people of different nationalities livingresiding in Australia, while the table shows percentage distributionsdemographic figures broken down by city and countryside for each nationalitywhich are classified according to urban and rural areas.
Overall, Australians are the largest nationalities, residents, almost three-quarters of the major population, and they tend to live in the urban area. This figure is followed distantly by other citizens who are almost twice the residents from Great Britain (7%), New Zealanders at 3%, Chinese at 2%, and people from the Netherlands at just 1%.
The table shows thatIt is readily apparent that Chinese people liveChinese live predominantly in cities, at 99%in the cities up to 99%, with only 1% living in the countrysidewhereas only 1% live in the countryside. The other vast majority of city dwellers is New Zealanders and British, which display nearly identical proportions around 90%. For AustraliansIn terms of living areas, Australians are lessfew likely to live outside cities, at 20%outside the cities, nearly 20%, while the remaining 80% livethe rest still live in citiesurban environments. Similarly, 83% of the Dutch live in cities and 17% in the countryside.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response selects the principal proportions and urban-rural patterns accurately, with a clear overview and well-chosen supporting figures. Its main limitation is recurrent awkward grammar and imprecise phrasing, which sometimes obscures otherwise sound comparisons; the highest priority is to use controlled comparative sentence structures and precise nationality nouns while retaining the same accurate coverage of the visuals.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and accurate figures cover the dominant nationality and the main urban-rural patterns.
Make the overview more sharply comparative by stating that every listed nationality is predominantly urban, with Chinese residents the most concentrated in cities.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from an overview of the pie chart to detailed comparisons from the table.
Separate the overview from detailed percentages and group the table comparisons by similar and contrasting patterns.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the task, though several nationality labels and comparison phrases are imprecise.
Use precise forms such as Australians, British people, and less likely rather than awkward phrases such as largest nationalities and few likely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence structures communicates the comparisons, but agreement, plural, article, and clause-control errors recur.
Prioritise subject-verb agreement and clean comparative clauses, especially when referring to nationalities and percentages.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table and pie chart illustrates populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.
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