The graph below shows the popularity of different fast foods in Britain and the trends in their consumption.
Sample Response
The line graph showsThe graph shows the changes in consumptionchanges in the demand for hamburgers, fish and chips, and pizzahamburgers, fish & chips and pizza from 1970 to 1990.
It is clearIt is immediately apparent that in 1970, the most popularin 1970 the most popular food was pizza. The demand for pizza started from 300 grams followed by a spectacular fall of 200 grams in 1985.
A notable featureThe striking feature of the graph is the sharp rise in fish and chips consumptionthe demand for fish & chips. In 1970, fish & chips were the second favourite food among people, and from 1980 on the total demand surged to a high of 500 grams from 99 in 1970.
Furthermore, hamburgers were the least popular food in 1970 with the total demand of 15 grams, which increased gradually till 1985. The hamburger consumptiontotal demand for hamburgers rose sharplyskyrocketed to approximately 280 grams299 grams in 1990.
OverallIn conclusion, there was a substantialsubsential increase in the demand for hamburgers and fish and chipssea food, while pizza consumption fell overallwhereas there was a significant fall in the popularity of pizza.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is clearly organised by food type and gives an accurate broad overview of rising hamburger and fish-and-chip consumption alongside falling pizza consumption. Its main limitation is the uneven precision of the figures, including incorrect starting and ending values and the omitted late recovery in pizza consumption. The highest priority is to verify each data point against the graph and make more explicit comparisons across the three foods.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the main overall trends and covers all three foods, but several figures are inaccurate and pizza's final rise is omitted.
Check exact values and turning points, especially the 1970 figures and pizza's slight increase after 1985.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from an overview through separate discussions of each food to a concise conclusion.
Strengthen cohesion by comparing the foods directly within body paragraphs rather than presenting each trend mainly in isolation.
Lexical Resource
There is a useful range of trend vocabulary, although some choices are exaggerated or imprecise and one spelling error is noticeable.
Use measured trend language such as rose steadily or fell gradually and proofread words such as substantial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences is generally controlled, with occasional awkward constructions that do not impede meaning.
Improve article and preposition control in phrases such as started at 300 grams and with a total consumption of 15 grams.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the popularity of different fast foods in Britain and the trends in their consumption.
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