The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
Sample Response
The provided table represents information on sales at a small city-centre restaurantsales of a small city centre restaurant in a typical October week starting from the 7th October and ending on 13th October. It is immediately apparent that dinner sales aresale during the dinner time is much higher than lunch salesmuch higher than lunch; also,, also, sales during the weekend arethe sale during the weekend is much lower as compared to weekdays. In detaildetails, lunch salesthe sale amount for lunch during the weekdays (Monday to Friday) ranged from $2,375 to $2,595ranges between 2400 to 2500 dollars; however,, however, sales on Saturday and Sunday fellthe sale on Saturday and Sunday fall well below that rangemuch beyond that range at 1950 and 1550 dollars respectively. On Monday, the restaurant made $2,400 in lunch salesthe restaurant sells lunch for 2400 dollars and the sale reached a peak of $2,595reaches the peak of 2595 on Wednesday. The sale then fell slightlyfalls down a bit on Thursday and recovered to $2,500recover back to 2500 level on Friday. For dinner sales in this restaurant, the sale is much higher the whole week compared to the lunch sale. Nevertheless, comparing weekdays and weekend sales, the pattern is similar to that for lunch salessimilar as it is for lunch sales. If we look at weekday sales trend, it is obvious that the sales are quite erratic. On Monday, the restaurant makes a sale of 3623 dollars from dinner and on Tuesday it goes up a bit but on Wednesday. It touches the lowest level of the weekday at 3445 dollars then it recovers and reaches a peak of 4350 dollars on Friday.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response gives an effective overview of the weekday/weekend and lunch/dinner contrasts, then supports it with several accurate daily figures. Its main limitations are an inaccurate weekday lunch range, incomplete coverage of weekend dinner sales, and recurring sentence-control errors; the highest priority is to compare the full set of peaks and lows accurately while revising fragments, agreement, and awkward sales expressions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview captures the principal contrasts and many weekday values are accurate, but the stated weekday lunch range is wrong and weekend dinner details are omitted.
Report the exact lunch range and compare Friday’s dinner peak with both weekend dinner figures, including Sunday’s $2,450 low.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report moves logically from the overview to lunch and dinner details, but paragraphing is absent and one broken sentence interrupts progression.
Separate the overview, lunch details, and dinner details into paragraphs and join the Tuesday-to-Wednesday comparison into one complete sentence.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate vocabulary for trends and comparisons, but “sale” is overused and several expressions, including “fall much beyond,” are imprecise.
Use accurate alternatives such as “revenue,” “takings,” “fell below the weekday range,” “peaked,” and “declined.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied sentence forms, but frequent agreement errors, comma splices, article problems, and a sentence fragment sometimes weaken control.
Correct plural agreement and sentence boundaries, especially “sales were,” “the figures fell,” and the fragment beginning “It touches the lowest level.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
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