The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
Sample Response
The table shows daily sales at a restaurant in the downtown business district during an October week. The data is split into two parts, first being salessale generated for lunch and second for dinner. At the outsetonset, the revenue generatedsale revenue generated during dinner is higher than lunch revenueis more than that of lunch and weekend salessales amount during weekends is lower than the average revenuewhen compared to average revenue earned during a typical weekday. The week starts on Monday with revenue of 2400 dollars for lunchfor the lunch and $3,623 for dinner, which was about 51% higher than the lunch figure3623 for dinner which is more than 50% of revenue realised during the lunchtime. During lunch hours the revenue seems to be showing an increasing trend and reached its peak on Wednesday with $2595. It fellcrashed from there to $2375 on Thursday but regainedregain momentum on Friday with a figureclosing figure of $2500. By contrast, dinner revenueOn the other hand revenue during lunch hours seems to be fluctuating over the weekdaysdwindling throughout the week. Showing an increase on Tuesday and then a fall on Wednesday. It then reached its weekly highBut it closed its week with the highest revenue of $4350 on Friday. Weekends tells a different story altogether, revenue which was hovering around $2400 for lunch and around $3600 for dinner, crashed to its lowest point on Sunday with disappointing figures of $1550 & $2450 for lunch and dinner respectively.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response provides a relevant overview and identifies the main weekday, weekend, and peak-sales patterns with several accurate figures. Its effectiveness is reduced by a mistaken lunch reference when describing dinner, some imprecise trend statements, and frequent grammatical slips and fragments. The priority is to separate lunch and dinner comparisons carefully, then edit each sentence for complete structure and accurate agreement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main features are generally covered with a valid overview, but one dinner trend is mislabeled as lunch and some descriptions are imprecise.
Track lunch and dinner in separate detail sentences and verify every label and trend against the table before finalising the report.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a broadly logical weekday-to-weekend sequence, though the single dense paragraph and several fragments weaken progression.
Use distinct overview, weekday-detail, and weekend-detail paragraphs, and attach each fragment to a complete sentence.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of trend and revenue vocabulary, but choices such as 'at the onset,' 'crashed,' and 'disappointing' are awkward or subjective.
Prefer neutral, precise reporting verbs such as 'rose,' 'fell,' 'peaked,' and 'recorded' for numerical changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex forms are attempted, but errors in agreement, verb form, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently.
Correct forms such as 'sales were,' 'regained,' and 'weekends tell,' and turn sentence fragments into complete clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
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