The graphs show enrolment in different colleges in the Higher Colleges of Technology in 1999.
Sample Response
The graphs presented give information about the number of graduatesstudents enrolled in 10 different Higher Colleges of Technology (HCT) branches across the UAEbranches across UAE by gender and the level of college education they achieved. Overall, Dubai Women’s College has the highest number of graduatesenrolment among all the colleges while Ras Al Khaimah Men’s College has the smallestleast number of students.
The charts showAs is presented, there are more female graduates than male graduates and most of the students finished with Certificates. Bachelor’s degree has the least number of graduates and there are no male students atunder this level. In terms of the number of graduates in Colleges, Dubai Women’s has the largest number of successful students with a figurepopulation of 547 followed by Dubai Men’s with 426. Abu Dhabi Women’s had 293 graduates, 20 students more compared to Abu Dhabi Men's College, which hadAbu Dhabi Men’s graduate with only 273. A majority of the graduates are female. Both male and female students graduated mostly with certificates. Just under 700 graduates were female and around 575 graduates were male in the same level. As is observed there are no male students in bachelor’s level and there are about 50 female graduatesapproximately 60 female students on this level making it the smallest number of graduates at any levelleast number of lever achieved by the students. The pie chart shows that 50% of all the students graduated with certificates. 27% of which graduated with a diploma. Higher diploma level was 7 percentage points lower than the diploma share7% lesser than that of the latter while only 3% achieved the bachelor’s degree.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview and captures the principal patterns across all three visuals, including the largest and smallest colleges and the dominance of certificate graduates. Its main limitation is imprecise chart language and a slightly inaccurate bachelor figure, compounded by a long detail paragraph; prioritise referring consistently to graduates, reporting the bachelor data accurately, and separating college totals from level-by-gender comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers the main patterns across the college bar chart, the level-by-gender chart, and the pie chart. It accurately identifies Dubai Women's as the largest and Ras Al Khaimah Men's as the smallest, but it sometimes says enrolment when the visuals show graduates and gives a slightly high estimate for female bachelor graduates.
Refer consistently to graduates, not enrolment, and report bachelor graduates as about 50 females and no males.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report has a clear overview and then moves through college totals, gender and level details, and the pie chart. However, the second paragraph is very long and contains repeated framing phrases.
Use separate paragraphs for college totals and for education levels by gender.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate, but there are repeated word-choice problems such as enrolment, population, and lever achieved.
Use precise chart language: graduates, colleges, levels, certificate, diploma, higher diploma, and bachelor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The meaning is clear, but there are frequent article, preposition, and singular/plural errors.
Check phrases such as the highest number of graduates, at this level, and Abu Dhabi Men's College.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs show enrolment in different colleges in the Higher Colleges of Technology in 1999.
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