The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.
Sample Response
The line graph shows how many people visited four museums around the worldin different countries in the world between 1980 and 2015.
OverallAll in all, the Louvre Museum was the most popular, with roughly 7.8–9.5 million visitors over the periodwith between approximately 8 and 9 million visitors each year. The two least visited wereThe least popular were the Shenzhen Museum and the London Science Museumthe Shenzhen and the London Science Museum, with roughly 2 to just over 4 million visitors each yearwith no more than 4 million visitors each year.
The number of visitors to the London Science Museum declined graduallydecreased slowly from just over 4 million in 1980 to just over 2 million in 2015around 2 million in 2015. By contrast, the number of visitors to the Vatican Museumsthe visitors to the Vatican Museum roseincreased from just under 5 million in 1980 to just over 9 million in 2015around 9 million in 2015.
MeanwhileIn addition, the number of visitors to the Shenzhen Museum stayed about the same over the thirty-five-year period. ItThey fell from just under 4 million in 1980 to about 3 million in 2000just over 3 million in 2000 and then recovered to just under 4 million in 2015then rose to just under 4 million again in 2015.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response gives a clear, well-organised account of the principal trends, with accurate start-to-end figures for the Vatican, London Science, and Shenzhen museums. Its main limitation is the thin treatment of the Louvre: the overview compresses its fluctuating figures into an overly narrow range and the body provides no supporting detail. Add a concise comparison of the Louvre's rise, dip, and final peak to make coverage more complete.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies the broad ranking and the response accurately describes three museums, but the Louvre's important fluctuations and final peak are insufficiently covered.
Add the Louvre's rise to about nine million, its dip around 2000, and its peak near 9.5 million in 2015.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged in a clear sequence with focused paragraphs and effective contrasts between upward, downward, and stable trends.
Integrate a Louvre detail paragraph so that the overview's main claim is fully supported in the body.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary for trends, quantities, and comparisons is accurate and appropriately varied, with only minor repetition and occasional awkward phrasing.
Vary repeated references to visitor numbers and use more precise language for the Louvre's fluctuation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with strong control, and the few awkward constructions do not impede communication.
Refine article use and parallel wording in phrases such as 'the Shenzhen and the London Science Museum.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.
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