The table below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010.
Sample Response
The table illustrates the average scoresthe breakdown of scores for the IELTS General Test in 2010. It shows separate scores for all four modules (Listening, Reading, Writing and Speaking), together with the overall band scores for students from four different language groups Deletearound the world. OverallFrom an overall perspective, German speakers achieved the highest overall band score. Moreover, they recorded the highest scores among the four language groupsscored the highest of all four language groups in three modules of the test (Listening, Writing and Speaking)(Listening, Writing, Speaking). French-speaking candidatesFrench speaking candidates scored the second-highest overall scoresecond highest overall score of 6.56.7 out of 9, followed by Malay and Indonesian speakers at 6.4 and 6.3, respectivelyclosely followed by Malay and Indonesian speakers. Although French speakers did not do so well in the Reading, Speaking and Listening modules compared to Indonesian and Malay speakers, there was a significant difference in their grades for the Writing module. This Writing scoreThese grades was higher than that ofwere high relative to Indonesian and Malay candidates. NotablySurprisingly, Malay speakers, who had the second-lowest overall result, recordedachieved the second lowest result overall, achieved the highest scoreresults among the four language groups in Readingof all four language groups for the Reading module. As a final point, it is interesting to note that the scores for each module show that all students, on average, scored the highest marks for the Speaking module and the lowest marks for the Reading module.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is fluent, logically sequenced, and uses varied language to compare the four groups, with a useful overview of the strongest German performance and the general module pattern. Its main weakness is factual precision: the French overall result is misstated, and several French comparisons with Indonesian and Malay candidates are overgeneralised. Prioritise checking every claimed ranking and figure directly against the table.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report identifies several important rankings and an overall module pattern, but it gives the French overall result incorrectly and overstates some cross-group differences.
Verify each figure and separate equal, higher, and lower results when comparing French, Indonesian, and Malay speakers.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence moves clearly from the overall leader through group comparisons to a final cross-module observation, but the entire report forms one paragraph.
Divide the report into an introduction and overview followed by logically grouped detail paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary for describing rankings and comparisons is generally varied and appropriate, although 'scores,' 'results,' and related wording recur.
Use more exact comparative language such as 'equal to,' 'slightly above,' and 'the lowest of the four' where the data require it.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a good range of complex sentences with generally accurate grammar and clear meaning.
Polish minor forms such as hyphenating 'French-speaking' and streamline long comparative clauses for greater precision.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010.
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.