The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
Sample Response
The provided bar charts demonstrate the number of people who visited three different museums, the national gallery, the British Museum and Victoria and Albert Museum in London from 2007 to 2012, given the number was on millions and bases on a yearly basis.
Overall, visitors number was rose year by year in the national gallery while we can clearly see small and slowly fluctuation for two other museum.
For the British MuseumFor British museum, there were 12 million visitors in 2007, and this figure halved the following yearin 2007 had 12 million travellers, and became half after a single year and remained at the same level in 2009remained the same number till 2009. The number of visitors thenLater number of visitors grew and in 2011 reached the same level as four years earlierin 2011 had the same number as 4 years ago had. Additionally, inIn 2012, 14 million people visited this museum. For the National GalleryFor the national gallery, it recorded about 6 million visitors in 2007in 2007 British museum and this museum had same annual visitors and this figure increased, particularly in 2010 and 2012which increased slowly and in 2010 and 2012. 11 million citizens went there after a year had the highest number of holidaymakers among three historical places and throughout the period on account of roughly 16 million.
For the Victoria and Albert MuseumFor Victoria and Albert museum, nearly 14 million people visited this museumpreferred this museum for visiting in 2007 and 2008. After 2008After that year, the number of visitorsthe sightseer number declined and reached its lowest pointtouched its dip in 2010; this was about the same as the National Gallery's figure in 2007; it then roseit was the same as the national gallery number had in 2007, it rose, and the number of visitors reachedwas 10 million in 2012.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response reports several useful figures and broadly follows each museum across the period, with the British Museum and Victoria and Albert Museum sections containing substantial accurate detail. Its main limitation is an imprecise overview and a false claim that the British Museum and National Gallery had equal visitor numbers in 2007. The priority is to state the main trends accurately, then express each comparison in complete, controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The task is addressed with several accurate figures, but the overview is weak and one major 2007 comparison is incorrect.
State the main trends accurately and check every cross-museum comparison against the chart before writing.
Coherence and Cohesion
The museum-based paragraphing is sensible, but progression within the National Gallery section becomes difficult to follow.
Present each museum's figures in chronological order and separate different comparisons into complete sentences.
Lexical Resource
There is some range, but frequent inappropriate substitutes for visitors and faulty collocations reduce precision.
Use accurate chart vocabulary such as 'visitors', 'figures', 'rose', 'fell', and 'fluctuated' consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex forms are attempted, but frequent errors in clauses, agreement, and verb forms often strain readability.
Build shorter complete sentences with explicit subjects and correct verb forms before combining ideas into longer structures.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
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