The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.
Sample Response
The bar graph provides informationgives the information about the numbers of mobile phones and landlinesindividuals using mobile phones and landlines in different countries per 100 peopleamong hundred people.
It shows that the number of mobile phonestrend of using mobile phones is higher than that of landlinesgreater than the landline, but in Canada, US and Denmark, people use more landlines than mobile phones. In Italy, mobile phones are used by people at the maximum rate, but in Canada, it’s used least, but Denmark has about 88 landlines per 100 peoplein Denmark near about 90% of people use a landline, and the landline figure is lowest in Italythe least used is in Italy.
DeleteWith the advance in technology, mobile-phone figures vary across countriespeople use more mobiles in different countries have different proportions. In Italy, there were 90 mobile phones per 100 people90 people use mobile out of 100, which is the maximum rate. In Canada, mobile-phone use was the lowestIn Canadians used minimum rate of usage of mobiles about 38 per 100 peopleabout 37%. Mobile-phone figures for Sweden, the UK, Denmark, Germany and the US wereSweden UK Denmark German and US people using mobile in descending order about 88, 84, 83, 71 and 48 per 100 people, respectivelyabout 87, 84, above 80, above 70 and less than 50 respectively of 100 people.
Whereas landline usage shows different trends among different countries, its usage trend is so low. In Denmark, the maximum number of people is near about 90 out of 100, and in Italy, the lowest figure was about 43 landlines per 100 peoplethe lower number of people use about 43 use landlines. In Canada, the US, Germany, Sweden, landline figures rangedlandline usage range frombetween 60 to 67, but the UK had about 58 landlines per 100 peopleUK people use about 57 out of 100 people.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its clear overview and generally accurate selection of the highest and lowest figures across both services. Its main weakness is that frequent awkward sentence structures and imprecise phrasing sometimes obscure otherwise relevant comparisons. The highest priority is to present each comparison in a clean grammatical sentence while checking every reported figure and country grouping against the chart.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview identifies the main cross-country pattern, and most maxima, minima, and values are selected accurately.
Check minor numerical groupings, such as Sweden’s landline figure, and make the comparisons more precise.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically separated into overview, mobile-phone, and landline paragraphs, with broadly clear progression.
Replace long chains joined by repeated but and whereas with shorter sentences and clearer reference words.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of comparison vocabulary, though repetition and awkward collocations reduce precision.
Use natural data-reporting phrases such as stood at, was highest in, and exceeded rather than repeating use and usage.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex forms is attempted, but frequent agreement, article, and sentence-structure errors weaken control.
Prioritise complete subject-verb structures and accurate plural forms before adding complex clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.
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