The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners.
Sample Response
The pie chart compares the nutritional constituents (carbohydrates, protein, glucose, saturated fat and other nutrients)( carbohydrates, protein, Glucose, Saturated fats, other nutrients) of two different dinners (macaroni and a medium baked potato).( Macaroni and Medium baked potato)
Overall, the proportion of carbohydrates in both dinners is highthe value of carbohydrates in both dinners are high. In addition, the medium baked potato hashad a higher percentage of protein and glucose.
There is a substantial amount of protein and other nutrients present in a medium baked potato. A medium baked potato has a lower percentage of saturated fat atof Saturated fats at 10 per cent compared with macaronicompared to Macaroni with 21 per cent. The glucose content of both macaroni and medium baked potato accounted for 11 per cent and 15 per centstood at 11 per cent and 15 per cent, respectively. Other nutrients in macaroni accounted forWhile other nutrients in macaroni recorded a lower percentage of 5 per cent, a medium baked potato had 15 per centmedium baked potato had 11 per cent.
Carbohydrates make up the largest proportionCarbohydrates have a higher percentage in both dinners. A medium baked potato had a lower proportion of carbohydratesMedium baked potato had a low carbohydrate but still formed its largest componentstill took a larger part of the meal at 35 per cent while Macaroni had more than half, at 52 per centmore than a quarter, 52 per cent. In contrast, a medium baked potato had more proteinmedium baked potato has more protein than macaroni at 25 per cent and 11 per cent, respectively.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is strongest in its clear organization and broad coverage of all five nutrients, with a useful overview of the main contrasts between the dinners. Its main limitation is precision: the baked potato's other-nutrient share is misstated, and some comparisons are expressed inaccurately or awkwardly. Prioritize checking every percentage against the charts and describing relative size precisely, especially that 52% is more than half.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A relevant overview and mostly accurate comparisons cover the main features, but the baked potato's other nutrients are incorrectly reported as 11% rather than 15%.
Verify every figure and describe major proportions precisely, including macaroni's 52% carbohydrate share as more than half.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses clearly from an overview to grouped details, although repetition and a few awkward transitions reduce fluency.
Group the data around the clearest contrasts and avoid restating the same point about carbohydrates in separate paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the task, but phrases such as 'value of carbohydrates' and 'had a low carbohydrate' are imprecise.
Use accurate proportion language such as 'carbohydrates accounted for 35%' and 'the carbohydrate share was lower.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys meaning, though agreement, article, punctuation, and tense errors recur.
Maintain consistent present tense and check agreement in phrases such as 'the proportion of carbohydrates is high.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners.
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