The table gives statistics showing the aspects of quality of life in five countries.
Sample Response
The table presents statisticsillustrates the information regarding the statistics of five countries in order to demonstrate the quality of life.
Overall, the USA has the highest quality of life as compared to the other nationsother Nation in terms of GNP per head, daily calorie supply, and life expectancy at birthyearly life expectancy, whereasWhereas Bangladesh has the lowest quality of lifequality of a life. Moreover, in the USA infant mortality rate is lower due to high-quality Lifestyle, while in Bangladesh motility rate of in infant is highest.
In Bangladesh, the quality of life is lower as compared to other countries. Bangladesh had 140 US dollars GNP per head and 1877 daily calorie supply per head In 1982. life expectancy at birth is 40 yearsthe birth year is 40 years in Bangladesh and the rate of infant mortality is higher, at 132 deaths per 1,000 live birthswith 132 infant mortality per 1000 live births. By contrastOn the opposite side, the USA had the highest GNP per head of 13,160 US dollarsGNP rate(13160 US dollars) per head and daily calorie supply per head of 3,653 caloriesdaily calorie supply (3653) per head. The life expectancy is also higher, at exactly 74 yearswhich is around 74 years. The infant mortality rate is lower in the USA. Bolivia and Indonesia had an equal GNP rate, daily calorie supply rate, and life expectancy rate. However, in terms of infant mortality,But, in terms of infant mortality Bolivia (124 )had a higher mortality rate thana high mortality rate as compared to Indonesia(87). After the USA, Egypt is the second-ranked countrysecond topmost country across the quality-of-life indicatorsin the aspects of a quality lifestyle.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response provides a clear overview of the strongest and weakest countries and supports it with several accurate figures for Bangladesh and the USA. Its main limitation is uneven and sometimes inaccurate coverage of the other countries, especially the claim that Bolivia and Indonesia share three equal measures. The highest priority is to compare all five countries selectively and verify every reported relationship against the table.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several accurate extreme values address the task, but intermediate countries receive limited coverage and one major comparison is inaccurate.
Compare Egypt, Bolivia, and Indonesia accurately, noting that only Bolivia and Indonesia's GNP figures are equal while their calorie and life-expectancy figures differ.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses from an overview to supporting figures, though the long final paragraph and some mechanical linking weaken the organisation.
Divide the details into two logically grouped paragraphs and use direct comparative sentences instead of repetitive transitions.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient to describe the data, but frequent awkward or inaccurate choices such as birth year, motility rate, and topmost reduce precision.
Use standard statistical expressions such as life expectancy, infant mortality rate, highest figure, and lowest figure consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex forms communicates the main meaning, but recurring errors with articles, agreement, capitalisation, and punctuation reduce control.
Proofread each sentence for article use and sentence boundaries, especially around country names, figures, and contrast clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table gives statistics showing the aspects of quality of life in five countries.
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