Line graph The picture below shows the use of renewable energy accounting the total energy from 1971 to 2011.
Sample Response
TheGiven is the line graphmap illustrating the share of energy from renewable sourcestrend of renewable energy usage across six nationsin 6 nations over a 40-year periodin a period of 40 years from 1971 to 2011.
Generally, this kind of energy became more popular among all examined nations. Throughout the years, the proportionrate in the UK remained the lowest while renewable energy was accounted for the largest share of total energymost commonly used in Finland.
Looking at the chart in more detail, Finland had the highest proportionmost significant figures, at about 24% in the first yearat 25% in the first year. This figure fluctuated in the next 20 years, following a downward trend before reaching the lowest point at over 15% between 1986 and 1991. The use of renewable energy in Finland gradually becamebecome more common in the next few decades and accounted for about 23%took up almost 25% of the total energy in the final year. The figures in Denmark and France followed the almost identical patterns, dropping to their bottom in 1986 before growing substantially until the end of the period.
With regardregards to the other 3 nations, the United States recorded the most significant growth in the use of renewable energy. Starting at a low of around 23%, its figure overtook that of France and DenmarkFrance and DIt i senmark in the last decade, reaching almost 20% in the final year. The remaining two nations, Germany and the UK, experienced a relatively gradual growth in their figures, which ended at about 13%almost 10% and over 5% respectively.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is well organised around a clear overview and sensible groupings, with a broad range of language for describing change. Some key claims are insufficiently precise—Finland did not rise overall, Germany finished near 13% rather than almost 10%, and Denmark and France were not fully identical—so the priority is to verify each overview statement and endpoint against the chart before refining the prose.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response selects major trends and comparisons effectively, but several overview and data claims are inaccurate or overstated.
Check the net change for Finland, Germany’s final value, and the differences between Denmark and France directly against the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion
A clear overview and well-chosen country groupings create strong logical progression across the response.
Make the transition into the final group slightly more concise and use the standard form “With regard to.”
Lexical Resource
A broad range of trend language is used effectively, although a few phrases are imprecise and one country name is corrupted.
Replace vague wording such as “most significant figures” with exact trend descriptions and proofread proper nouns carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex sentences are generally well controlled, with a few noticeable but non-impeding form and agreement errors.
Correct forms such as “over a period,” “gradually became,” and “with regard to” to improve consistency.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
Line graph The picture below shows the use of renewable energy accounting the total energy from 1971 to 2011.
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