The chart shows ways that schoolchildren get to school in three different countries.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates the various modes of transportvarious alternatives schoolchildren use to travel to schoollearners prefer to visit in school in three different nations.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart that the Car was the highest mode of transport used by students for their school, while the school bus is also popular among the children they travel to visiting in a school in the USA.
In detail, the maximum number of students like to travel by Car for their school with shares at 40 in the USA, but in the UK this number get declined by one and total of 39 learners opted the bus transport for their journey. Following this, in Australia, this figure decreasesthis value gets decreased to 25. moreover, schoolbus also has a positive trend among the schoolchildren which accounted at 37 in the USA, and this trend turns into negative with shares at 24 in the UK but in Australia 31 children visiting in school by bus.
Furthermore, those students who prefer to go to school by bicycle and walk have the same figuresame amount of value at five in the USA. However, in Australia, eight children use a bike for their school. In the UK this number was two lowerwas reduced by 2. Nextnext, 19 students19 of students visit the school on footby their feet in Australia. This figure fallsThis ratio sink to 15 in the UK.it is interesting to note that the least number of students travel to school by other methods with a figure of sixwhich ratio at six in Australia and four in the USA and the UKboth countries, the USA and UK.whilst, 11 children11 several children preferred public transport in Australia. However, in the USA this figure fallsthis number move down to nine.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response reports nearly all categories and most figures accurately, with sensible grouping by the two dominant modes and the remaining options. Its overview does not clearly summarize the main cross-country patterns, while frequent awkward wording, agreement errors, and faulty sentence boundaries make comparisons harder to follow. Prioritize a precise overview and use simple, grammatically complete comparative sentences throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most figures and transport categories are covered accurately, but the overview identifies only a limited USA-focused pattern and misses the clearest contrasts among the countries.
Summarize that cars dominate in the USA and UK, school buses lead in Australia, and walking is far more common in Australia and the UK than in the USA.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraph sequence is broadly logical, but mechanical linking, unclear references such as 'this value,' and faulty sentence boundaries weaken the flow.
Group the dominant modes and less common modes clearly, then use one complete comparative sentence for each related set of figures.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to describe modes and comparisons, but frequent inappropriate collocations such as 'visit in school,' 'positive trend,' and 'by their feet' reduce precision.
Use standard chart language such as 'travel to school,' 'accounted for,' 'fell to,' and 'went on foot.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but recurring errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, prepositions, capitalization, and punctuation occur throughout.
Prioritize accurate subject-verb agreement and sentence boundaries before attempting long multi-clause comparisons.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart shows ways that schoolchildren get to school in three different countries.
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