The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
Sample Response
The given line graph depicts the Australian teenagers’ habit of fast food consumption between 1975 and 2000between 1975 and 2000 years. It can be seen from the graph that the consumptionpopularity of hamburgers rose dramatically among the Australian teenagers whereas fish and chipsthe fish and chips gradually decreased. According to the graph, in 1975, the fish and chips were the most frequently eatenvery famous among the teenagers of Australia. Moreover, at that time, they were eatenit was eaten aboutalmost 100 times per year. After that, in 1980,After that in 1980, the popularity of fish and chips fell by 1980, then rose slightly in 1985decreased consistently; again it increased slightly in 1985. Then from 1985 to 2000 the demand for this fast food fell significantly: just under 40 timesjust under the 40 times eaten per year. On the other hand, it appears from the graph that the popularity of pizzas and hamburgers rose substantially. Nevertheless, pizza consumptionthe demand for pizza was constant from 1995 to 2000over a period of 1995 to 2000 and it was eaten nearly 85 timesit was nearly eaten 85 times in a year. SimilarlyOn the other side, the consumption rate of hamburgers rose steeply from 1985 to 1995 and then levelled offexponentially increased from 1985 to 2000 and the frequencythe number of eaten times per year was just above 100 times.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview of the three main trends and correctly notes the later plateau in pizza consumption, so the key message of the graph is easy to follow. Its main weakness is imprecise description and awkward language, particularly around the pace and frequency of hamburger consumption; the highest-priority improvement is to support each trend with exact start and end values and organize the overview and details into separate paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the main trends accurately: hamburgers and pizza rose, fish and chips fell overall, and pizza levelled off after 1995. Some descriptions are imprecise, especially the claim that hamburgers rose exponentially from 1985 to 2000.
Use exact start and end values for all three foods and describe the hamburger rise as steep but slowing after 1995.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report is logically organized around fish and chips first, then pizza and hamburgers. However, it is one paragraph and some linking phrases are repetitive.
Separate the overview and detailed trends, and group rising items together after describing fish and chips.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate, but some choices are unnatural for consumption data, such as "famous", "demand", and "number of eaten times".
Use "consumption", "frequency", "times per year", and "was eaten" consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is clear, but there are several errors with articles, time phrases, and passive structures.
Revise phrases after dates and use "from 1975 to 2000" without adding "years".
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
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