The pie charts below show the types of music media used from 1990 to 2010.

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Sample Response

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The given pie charts compareillustrate the comparison of various types of music mediamusic media delivery type for the years 1990, 2000 and 2010. OverallAccording to the given information, Digital Audio (MP3) became the most popular type of music storage and Cassette fadedfade away by 2000starting in 2000. In 1990, over halfover a half of all music was stored on Compact Disc (CD), with 55% of the total share that yeartotal music type share over that year. The figures for Cassette and Vinyl Record were similar, atwere very similar with 25% and 20%, respectively. Looking at types of music media in 2000music storage type in 2000, the most popular form of storage was Compact Disc (CD) accounting for 95%with 95% of the portion and Digital Audio (MP3) accounted for the remaining 5%a small fraction of 5% remained for Digital Audio (Mp3) in that year. Turning now to the most widely used music mediumlargest music storage kind in 2010, Digital Audio's share roseDigital Audio rose significantly from 5% to 60%60% of the share and the share for Compact Disc (CD)Compact Disc (CD) usage dropped considerably from 95% to 35%. Lastly, Vinyl Record accounted for 5% of the music storage portion in that year.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response accurately reports every proportion and clearly captures the decisive shift from cassettes and CDs towards digital audio. Its main limitation is language control, with recurring problems in noun forms, verb agreement, and awkward expressions for shares and media types; the single-paragraph format also weakens presentation. Prioritise natural percentage language and accurate sentence structures, then separate the overview from the chronological details.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The overview and detailed figures accurately present the main changes in music media across all three years.

Next step

Make the overview even sharper by noting that CDs peaked in 2000 before digital audio became dominant in 2010.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The report progresses coherently from the overall shift to chronological details, though all information appears in one paragraph.

Next step

Place the overview in its own paragraph and group the 1990 details separately from the 2000-to-2010 transition.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

A sufficient range of trend vocabulary is used, but several expressions for media categories and proportions sound unnatural or repetitive.

Next step

Prefer concise phrases such as 'media formats', 'accounted for 95%', and 'CD's share fell to 35%'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

A mix of structures communicates the data clearly, but errors in noun number, agreement, tense, and clause construction recur.

Next step

Correct forms such as 'media delivery types', 'cassettes faded away', and 'the remaining 5% was digital audio'.

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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1

The pie charts below show the types of music media used from 1990 to 2010.

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