The pie charts compare the expenditure of a school in the UK in three different years over a 20- year period.
Sample Response
These three pie charts show the expenses of a school in the UK in three years at ten-year intervalssubsequent years over a 20-year period.
Firstly, it can be seen that the largest sharevast majority of the expenditure was on teachers’ salarieson teacher’s salaries. InsuranceThe insurance accounted for the smallest sharegot the smallest pay in the three different years Deleteas well as the resources.
On the other hand, expenditure ono furniture and equipmenttypes of equipment was 15% in 1981 and 23% in 2001in 1981 and 2001 was high, after dropping to 5%dropping to five per cent in 1991. These could also be seen in 1981 to 1991 where expenses on other workers salaries were high, but in 2001 the expenses on other workers salaries were on the low side.
In conclusion, it is noticeable that the school spent more onthe school expenses was more on teachers’ salariesthe teacher’s salaries and spent the leastand a minimal amount spent on insurance in all three yearsfor the three different years.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the dominant spending category and some broad changes, and its paragraphing gives the report a recognizable structure. However, coverage is thin and occasionally unclear: several important movements and figures are omitted, one comparison involving resources is misleading, and the response is under length. Prioritize a fuller overview and two data-rich comparison paragraphs that accurately track all five categories across the three years.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies teachers' salaries as the largest item and notes some furniture and staffing changes, but it omits most figures, mischaracterizes resources, and is under length.
Add accurate comparisons for all five categories, especially the rise in insurance and the changing shares for resources and teachers' salaries.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report has a clear introduction, body, and concluding overview, but progression is weakened by vague referencing and a convoluted third paragraph.
Group details by clear trend patterns and replace references such as "These" with the exact spending categories.
Lexical Resource
The response uses some relevant spending vocabulary, but its range is limited and several choices are imprecise, including "insurance got the smallest pay".
Use precise chart language such as "accounted for," "rose to," and "fell from" with the correct category names.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent agreement, article, possessive, and sentence-completion errors reduce control.
Check plural possessives and subject-verb agreement, and rewrite incomplete clauses as fully controlled comparative sentences.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie charts compare the expenditure of a school in the UK in three different years over a 20- year period.
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